In case you didn’t notice, I’m way past broken
My tears, they fall, for words unspoken
Now all that’s left is a scar on my brain
Just a simple reminder that I’m not the same
I lost myself somewhere inside of you,
A place that is too dark to walk through
And it’s the one thing that will always keep us apart:
The bottomless chambers of your blackened heart
I looked beyond your mistakes and your flaws,
Never seeing you turn into a monster at all
I gave you a part of me I knew you could twist
Foolishly hoping deep down you were better than this
You told me before that you don’t run away
Yet you are not here though I’ve asked you to stay…
And if there’s one thing that will always keep us apart
It’s the bottomless chambers of your blackened heart
Author notes
bringonthethunder
In a list
A contest entry
- Love,Less, Lies, Mess. by Rachel21.
600 points, ended May 22, 2008, 17 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Emotions. by pancake.
580 points, ended May 23, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Love...With a Twist by Hidden.
480 points, ended June 7, 2008, 38 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Emotions Crying Out {Options} by newnoakua.
550 points, ended June 16, 2008, 92 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Love[[Tainted]] by edit my world..
525 points, ended July 22, 2008, 34 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Unrequired: Unrequited love by Tefnut.
525 points, ended July 15, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Something Sad by LittleDecoy.
900 points, ended August 31, 2008, 85 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow this is so perfect!
your an ahmazing writer!
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I don't even know what to say about this except...wow!
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ah-maze-ing piece..
you took the words out of my mouth & wrote them down in a beautiful & emotional way.
thank you soo much for entering my contest & good luc -
oh wow i love this!
"And if there’s one thing that will always keep us apart
It’s the bottomless chambers of your blackened heart"
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damn.
Sorry that was the first word that I said after reading this. This is good, this is really good.
Good luck in the contest.
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:)
one word...
BEAUTIFUL, the rhyming was gorgeous and it flowed beautifully, it didnt seem forced at all. I love the picture that you used to...[i wish i knew where it came from if you dont mind posting that in your authors notes] This was a well thought well written and well worded poem. Thank you so so much for entering...Good Luck
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Wow. Such a great piece! -
Nice...lovely. Good luck!
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this is so great!!!!!!!!!
well done! -
'You told me before that you don’t run away
Yet you are not here though I’ve asked you to stay…
And if there’s one thing that will always keep us apart
It’s the bottomless chambers of your blackened heart'
It is no wonder you got the Gold trophy!
This piece is amazing! I love the way you repeat:
'It’s the bottomless chambers of your blackened heart'
I love it!
Laura <3
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I love this poem so much, it makes me feel sad bcuz i just got dumped tonight, but it rly is a wonderful poem.
good-luck!!!
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OMG woah that was such a good poem though oh so sadd.. i loveeeee the last line a lot!! very very strong emotions its written very well. you know what i love your stuff your on my favs list ^_^
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loved it
this is a very fervent piece! it was very well written!
Keep up the good work
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very very.. wow facter
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hey!!!
hey its me again i havent been on in a couple of months wanted to read some of your poetry again. i love this one!!! i read your home page and i hate people who are judemental, i totally relate to u on that so thanks again
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very good, flows very well. some guys can be like that. amazing poem, don't let guys like that keep taking and taking and taking. you're worth more than that. keep up the good poetry
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wow...
this poem is really amazing
i can really relate to it honestly.. wow!
<3
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wow this is fantastic the pic only made it better i could really feel your pain and feel the hurt in your heart very great poem i enjoyed reading it
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Sweet :)
Wow.... very creative...really powerful... Great Poem
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Beautiful! :o)
i LOVE this poem. it flowed so so well, the rhymes are so good!
great writing!!!!!!!
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oooh i like this. alot. it really got to me because i am going through the same thing at this VERY MOMENT.. you commented on one of my poems awhile ago.. so i decided to read a few of yours.. and im glad i did.
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very nice! i especially like the first line. i like this poem a lot, keep up the good work.
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this is probably the best poem i've read on the whole allpoetry site so far. the rhythm and everything is- so good. btw, i really like your site too. i bet you here that all the time, but yeah... Send me a message!
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I don't know what to put here. Awesome?
This is fantastic. It's so simple and effective.
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