June floats into a firework sky
Quench my thirsty heart
Swim with me
In the sweet river
In the salty ocean
Hop the jagged shoreline
To the soft sands
Of this tresspassers land
Your smile melts
Like plastic in the beating sun
Touch your cheek
To see the love into your eyes
Pull you close to my soul
We dance a carnal dance of sails and winds
Will this end in sorry?
Pray the light never decease
Pray the heat keeps us baked
In the simple paradox
That keeps me in one piece
As soon as blue hits red
I begin to crack
My shattered self hangs on
And with each fray I slip
I glide past the moon
Into cobalt shadows
Hanging on my one thread
I plead for your grace
Writhing in fear
My arms become weak
The thread is released
My anxious heart hits nirvana
And I am at peace
As I drift to the bottom
I land on two feet
Author notes
Option #1
this is just about a forced love that doesnt last because it isn't genuine
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A contest entry
- For My Much Loved Friend by Clinging-to-Life.
450 points, ended April 10, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Turned Bitter by MrsJones.
450 points, ended May 9, 2008, 32 entries
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550 points, ended November 19, 2008, 26 entries
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A great entry
thanks for taking part, wishing you luck would be an insult to your talent
so take care
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Billy (Rhythm Child) -
i love your choice for words. they were awesome, and the imagery was great, once again.
My anxious heart hits nirvana
And I am at peace
As I drift to the bottom
I land on two feet
those are my favorite lines by far. good job
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Wonderful poem! I loved the language and the word choice. You did a fabulous job, breath of fresh air
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great work, thanks for entering. i think this poem fits the chosen option really well
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thank you for entering and best of luck in the contest
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aww so good! i love it! thankyou so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Great
loved the metaphors and the structure was interesting
this had a great emotion in it and it was very powerful
well done good luck and thanks for entering -
"Like plastic in the beating sun" favorite line out of the entire poem! i thought this was very vivid and had a great rhythm! thank you for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck!
NineTailedFox -
Good
This is a well penned poem that not only describes a state of mind , but makes an attempt to instill such thoughts within the reader's mind. The words are clever and have a gentle and somewhat familiar pitch to help the reader release control over to the words and feel them within. I enjoyed the skillful manipulation by the author through her charisma to lead you to a inner plateau of awareness with her great imagery and metaphors.
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hahaha way to go christinegroe and post a comment using nikki's own account I have said it once I will say it again I was completely blown away by this poem you're definitely one of the best writers that I know
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ABSOFRICKINLUTELY AMAZING!
oh mon dieu, this is the best poem I think you've ever written!!! you sure know how to pump up the vocab, and the imagery.... c'est magnifique!! <3 your best friend forever, Christina aka christinegroe
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