now summer hot
sweat from the bodies
kissing passionatly
between the oak trees
fall now cool
two apples tree hang low
covered up next to each other
wanting each other badly
winter come and all the do
is share ones love with eachother
going deeper faster hard they groove
deeper faster harder they move
spring now
new life is born
love enters
and lust is born
Please tell me what you think
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Good Write
I think you mean two apple trees hang lo. But I realy like this alot and think you painted a picture that is wonderful.
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I love it there passion and soul into it and i just love it
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:D
I love the imagery in this poem. Ha, Maybe you should write a romance novel.
. I loved reading this poem...maybe Ill read it again. "going deeper faster hard they groove
deeper faster harder they move"
I liked those lines. Keep writing.
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as the day goes on i continue to come back to this poem....
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wow! great poem. there's alot of feeling into it. i love it!
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amazing it made everything like pictures in my mind great use og imagination good work
kira
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Great!
Wonderful imagery... pretty pictures were painted in my mind! Very well written! i liked it very very much! your last two lines were simple and pure!
~Ranji
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this is well written i can feel some emotion & i can visualize the images. keep up the good work
--Blessed be--
Shacadia Shay
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wow. i always find it surprising for some reason when i see a sensual poem. and that's putting it lightly, seeing as how we've all felt like this at one time or another. the wording's a little awkward, but other than that, great poem. 3 cheers for lust.
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*eyes wide* wow
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I like how you used the different seasons. good write
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