There once was a girl
so easy to see
a girl everyone tried to be.
There once was a girl
who hated all
the popular girl she would try to call.
There once was a girl
who lived in her own world
away from the abuse she was hurled.
There once was a girl
who was scared of life
so she ended it with a knife.
There once was a boy
who pretened everyday
he kept his pain at bay.
There once was a boy
who cried all night
in pain from his daily fight.
There once was a boy
who couldn't stand his friend
so he put him to an end.
There once was a boy
that cut to deep
and forever he did sleep.
There once was a person
who whitnesed this all
and they did nothing for they would fall.
They stood their ground
as everyone died
in no one could they concide.
They were hated
for everything they did
so they shouldn't help they'd make it morbid.
Author notes
Girls:
ok 1st two about the girls are pretty much how one girls popular and the 2nd one loves her but could never tell her. the third one is about a girl who couldnt live in reality for it was to harsh and the fourth is about a girl who was teriffied and alone so she killed herself.
Boy:
the first one is about a guy who pretened to b happy all the time but relly wasnt. the 2nd is about a boy who is bullied daily and goes home depressed. the 3rd is about a boy who killked his friend bcuz he couldnt stand him. the fourth is about a boy that couldnt stand his life and ended it
They:
the first is about allt he people that could help the ones listed above but didnt bcuz they didnt want their reputation ruined. the 2nd is about how they couldnt trust anyone and ignored the deaths and the third is how they thought if they did help itd only make it worse
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Comments
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This is a great poem, and i completely disagree with the bitch that said it wasnt.
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Nice
I like the repetition, there was once....there once was...there once was.....
Thanks for the explanation, it helped....
And this is Chris by the way!!! Yippee I found you... -
lol and a prick
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LOVE IT
oh, and a prick.
=p.
nice choice of words.
mayybe..
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alex. that girl is a bitch.
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i like this, even though theyre are a few errors.
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thx at least sum1 does
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A good poet should be able to convey their meaning in the poem without having additional notes. When I read this I kept thinking, gee, another emo poem. I didn't understand it. Then I read the author notes and I still didn't understand it because I didn't read it properly because I was distracted by the spelling and grammatical errors. Need I say I'm not impressed?
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i dont care. you can think what you want. i didnt ask u to read it now did i?
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Yes, I can think what I want and that is my prerogative. And no, you did not ask me to read it but you are on a poetry site which is designed to share poetry and get feedback, and that is what I was giving you. Its up to you if you use it or not, if you want to stay as a mediocre unread poet who can't take honest criticisms for the rest of your life, then so be it.
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if u werent being such a bitch about it then i wouldnt b and im not a mediocre poet and i cant take critism when ppl rnt being mean about it but ur bein a fucking prick about it
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"i cant take critism when ppl rnt being mean about it"
That does not make any sense whatsoever. If you meant to say you can take criticism, then show it. If you aren't a mediocre poet, then prove it and please, make up your mind as to whether I'm being a bitch or a prick.
All I did was give you my opinion, and you choose to take offense to it. I don't particularly care and I don't care to continue this discussion with you. If you ever have anything worth the time I wasted reading this, then I'll pay attention.
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