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Half Crazy, Half Sane

 

Biting the chocolate
It's rotten and sour
My mentality is obscure
Resistance lost the power

Picking my the pieces
Of my shattered heart
So many times, have I stepped on them
Now, I don't know where to start

Cutting my fingers
The blood drips--
It's mesmerizing
My mind slips

What to do?
What to say?
I'm a broken doll
No one cares today

Outside, it's pouring
Half snow, half rain
Inside, it's pouring
Half crazy, half sane

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Written December 5th, 2003

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  • beautiful death
    December 23, 2003
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    Ummm I like this a lot it made me think. in a way the chocolate part confused me a little. but I like how you wrote it. This is a good poem. Sorry I didn’t write more I just woke up. Thanks for sharing. –gina


  • starryeyes17
    December 21, 2003
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    well..i really dont understand this bc the first stanza about the choclate...i dont get it ..so maybe the other judge will...hehe...goodluck to you!-lindsey

  • brokeninsides18
    December 14, 2003
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    sad hunni

    I LOVE THIS, it sooo explanes me right now and well i am inlove with it but it makes me wanna cry


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    December 10, 2003
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    I know all about the "half crazy, half sane" scenario! Happens to me often! I do not know why you feel no one cares, though, because I care. I care too much, perhaps, about everyone and their feelings, since I always seem to assimilate them and make them my own. However, though your soul feels as though it has a rift in it, truly you are not broken or neglected. The capacity to feel emotions is what makes us human--and yet, what often keeps us in our own internal struggles. I wish I knew how to erase the pain. This is my mission on earth, to make sure that people suffer less than what it may seem. But I feel like I have failed you. All I can offer at the moment is to say keep on writing out your feelings, and trust that someone else knows where you are coming from.

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • Daoine
    December 9, 2003
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    I agree with Gem. Feelings and situations do not last forever..the hardest parts that we deal with are tests. You are not alone. You better remember that. There are people who care about you. I know I care if you hurt yourself. You are not broken because there is always going to be tomorrow..and that day will be different..and the next day. You may feel trapped but you aren't..have faith. Trust in something..even if it is your skating. Hope is still alive. We do care about you here in AP.
    Hugs ya tight.
    Daoine

  • Confused Gemini
    December 6, 2003
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    girl look, i know that everything is getting hard and you don't like dealing with it and i understand that more then anyone else who knows you would, but please don't do what i think you are thinking about even though i know you wont. you are not a broken doll and no matter what i would still care and love you muy mucho mi chica! i know how it is to feel that you are going insane and crazy and noone can see it because it is on the inside i am here for you either way gurl aight i love this one alot great job

    keep up the great writes

    Gem


  • Bluestar
    December 6, 2003
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    *blue gives Scarlett a big hug * Hope that you are OK, try ice cream - it helps a lot more Hope that you feel better soon.

    Blue


  • Desire gold member
    December 5, 2003
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    to you~
    Lost my love three years ago~ Saturday is his birthday~He won't be here to celebrate~ He will be celebrating with the Angels~ I can understand loss to a certain extent~ More to you~ Best wishes for healing too~ Desire

  • MysticRoseTears
    December 5, 2003
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    I can relate, especially, What to do?
    What to say?
    I'm a broken doll
    No one cares today
    I can really relate with everything that is going on in my life.
    Great poem, I constantly ask myself if I'm really ok
    Edited on Dec 05, 6:28 p.m. because 'My whole life is a mistake, why not this too?'.

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