Pregnant off aggressions' best grace as ladies legs
tumble then roll
The drifter has got the best taste
punctual stride
the best one here in this trendy
coffee house
Living in and out of poetic addresses
Living in and out of antonyms sugar kisses
coming off me to the fairy tale ideologies
Living off them, you see
In actuality, I am the cynic in your head
breaking your optimists neck
Skinny, so skinny
Industrial shipping yard
trapped in the one place you can never leave
The downtown arena tries and tries
in getting the young to stay forever
to support the movie churches
Many, so many
Indeed, this was easy to play off
like the song they keep on blasting
trying to get a rise out of my throat
Even still,
loving solitude
Even still,
falling in love
with daises
a romantic mystery
in a snuff film industry
Author notes
My best friend is a pricess baby doll
A contest entry
- Poems of a City by NurseChilly.
1800 points, ended April 11, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I think you've really tried hard here, but there are some grammatical errors, the opening lines are a bit of a mouthful, pregnant off of?? - not sure how that works?
but i do however feel, you've gotten some great imagery that just slips over the city.... so well done
I'll say thank you for entering and good luck too
G.x
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You're brilliant.
I'm almost speechless. I wouldn't change a thing about this piece. I really like your style, your perception of reality. It's disjointed and surreal and chaotic.
I'll be sure to keep an eye on your work.
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oh man. thanks. i had no idea. i'm glad someone likes em. i think you get it too- which is also nice.
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If I'd 'a seen this poem coming, "Josephine", I'd 'a stepped off the side walk and shuffled on to the other side of the street!Annexed Josephine
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