Struggle for fresh air
scarce space to stand
walking amid flows of faces
streaming noise makes million muted
explosions; city abound in sounds
carrying proof of tears, trials and love.
Amber light clings to moist smoke
hovers above shiny shards of day’s indifference
steps have the crunch of sand underfoot;
and I breathe easy here.
When night expands sidewalks
into spacey thoroughfares
where clicking heels and perfumed
laughter, hide emptiness behind eyes
and untended wants; music is a siren call,
and sirens are familiar as neon night.
Mascara and almond skin blend
red flashing hues make Love more beautiful,
heads turn and glinting glances
finding the one, or just for one
dim lit city night.
A contest entry
- Poems of a City by NurseChilly.
1800 points, ended April 11, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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some subtle alliteration here PK and I love the sights and colours you've brought to this... the siren of the night huh?? mascara and almond skin... nice
many many thanks for entering this contest
well done
G.x
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I really love the last stanza...but then again, I seem always like it when "mascara" is blended so well with the "almond skin" in a dim city light. Beautiful.
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"steps have the crunch of sand underfoot;
and I breathe easy here."
What a stunning scape you've penned here.
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This goes right to the heart of a big part of "the city's" psychology," Peteskid": the crowds who create annonimity, a place to hide in plain sight, but the hightened longing for the most intimate human contact.
Well done!
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Wow... This reminds me of a few places in this particular city.
"When night expands sidewalks
into spacey thoroughfares
where clicking heels and perfumed
laughter, hide emptiness behind eyes"
Wall Street to Canal? Lovely image. One
Dez
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lower Manhattan, Soho, Greenwich still think of the City as my playground, not surprising it creeps in...PK
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Made me think of Rio, sounds and sights and the feeling of being so much a part of the city.
Such a good display you have here!
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I don't much like cities, but there's a lot to like about this view of being in one. The third stanza made me see a night scene, with all the siren calls and neon lights, the excitement of it all. Just for one dim lit city night - ah! Very well written, the mood from solitary day to shared night is very identifiable.
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