The cradle of the human race,
Where modern man first showed his face,
The homo races natal place -
That's Africa.
Massive mountains topped with snow
With plains and jungle far below,
Where all of nature seems to grow
Wild Africa
Mother Nature's widest span,
Safari could be perfect plan,
For anyone who finds they can
See Africa
The racist farmers tried to rule
And keep all others out of school.
The ideas of a crazy fool:
South Africa
Mad dictators still in charge,
Qualified through repechage,
Put rampant killers out at large
Poor Africa.
Unhinged gangs who rape and kill,
Mutilate for morbid thrill,
Brutality is with us still!
In Africa.
Democracy may start to thrive
While there are good men left alive
And to this end we all should strive
For Africa.
A thousand races interbreed,
To share resources out of need
And say good-bye to foreign greed,
Save Africa!
All man's best and worst are here
With rule of justice or of fear.
Support the good and hold it dear
All Africa...
A contest entry
- Rhyming Rumble 1 ( part one of a 3 part series ) by RuthKephart.
525 points, ended April 5, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent! Wow. You have evoked much emotion in this amazing rhyme.
"Mad dictators still in charge,
Qualified through repechage,
Put rampant killers out at large
Poor Africa."
This stanza is exceptional. I will admit, I needed to look up repechage and am so glad I did. A better word is simply non-existent.
Very well done. This was simply a joy. Best of luck. ~Pamela
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I must admit I was rather pleased with the usage, the "getting in by the back-door" element seemed so appropriate.
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I really enjoyed this poem. Best of luck in the contest
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An excellent example of meter and rhyme this poem compiles both the good and bad that is Africa and speaks to the human need to right injustices around the world. Love, love the rhyme scheme with the repetition of Africa in the final line of each stanza. As was already said this brings cohesiveness to the poem and with changing the first word in that line it keeps the poem from sounding too repetitive. Thank you for this entry and best wishes in the contest
Ruth
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You have managed with the last line of each stanza to bring cohesion to a very full and informative piece about a great country who's diversity knows no bounds.
An excellent poem that is a joy to read.
All the best in the contest...
Sue
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A telling piece of writing! I like the way you have produced your last line in each stanza, this gives your poem the emphesis to bring home your main point.
Well done and best wishes for the contest.
Katie
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Brilliant compassionate write Jeff-right down to the bare knuckle-telling it like it is-power to your pen-
xxx Hilly
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Another penning in that unique voice, this time with passion and COMpassion. A solid piece of agitprop. Do well in the contest!
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