for time and place
i look for again
i see the girl
i see her skin
i caress her to the ground
touch her up and down
wanting this feeling to last
i sink it in
now i begin
deep faster harder
i want her
deeper
Please tell me what you think
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O/////O very good poem >/////<
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Nice...I like it. I don't know what I did with my poem called lust.
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this is very good. much passion in it.
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wow
wow nice poem it flows very nice!
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hey, I haven't heard from you in a while...
r u mad at me or something? -
Uh~oh!
lol, I love this one!=)
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beautiful!
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good but it jumps to quickly
"now i begin
deep faster harder
i want her
deeper"
it sort of flows but not as well as your other poems. also i have noticed that you have 2poems with the tittle Lust i suggest you find another tittle for one of them.
--Blessed be--
Shacadia Shay -
*fans herself* this was very hot. which i like in a poem. i noticed in your other rendition of this poem you changed it almost completely. yes the setting is important, but it's important to get the balance between the expression of emotion and imagery that it's all in. you don't want one of those to overpower the other, otherwise you're not getting the full extent of the poem. but other than that, this is HOT!!!
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sexyfulls. i like it alot, i should show this to my Baby.
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good poem but wheres the setting for outdoors.
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