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Haiku For the Lonely Forest Dweller

  I wake up alone
Everything is damp with dew
    The old pines creak wearily

  The sunlight dives through
The rough, old arms of the trees
    And splinters across the ground

  Orange pine needles
Sponge-like and sticky under
    My bare, rubbery callused feet

  I can't remember
The last time I heard your voice
    I walk down a narrow path

    Last nights rain dissolves
Some needles stick to my feet
  I feel cold, I'm ill today

    My stomachs upset
Some birds move from branch to branch
  I get tired of walking

    A turtle swimming
A couple of ducks fishing
  I heard bird songs above me

  I came here to find
    A piece of life gone missing
I found everything I love

  Everything worth love
    I live in an old forest
It creaks and groans like a house

...When my journey ends
    When this body becomes earth
    My soul will move these trees like

The soft spring winds do
  They keep me awake at night
  I am forced to hear their song

  More birds here today
    I watch the pine needles fall
The sun stream is leaking down

Some deer watch me walk
  They stand alert in the distance
      I am no threat, they move on

      I find some old shells
  They are dirty, no longer hot
I trip on a trees thick root

  I am alone here
I carve a poem into
The bark of a frayed pine tree

"My spirit has grown
In the cage we call body
My heart has turned into mud...

The loneliest man
Is often the deepest woods
Growing and shedding his soul...

Long I have been here
Waiting, God will intervene
And I will become a dream...

...Long forgotten by the world"

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  • Paloszoo gold member
    August 13

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    This is a breathtaking chain of haikus! The story it tells is strong and powerful. Unfortunately, the ku's themselves aren't traditional 5-7-5. Thanks so much for entering my haiku contest. It's a pleasure reading your fine work


  • DeathlyAngel
    May 30, 2008
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    this is really good. Awsome job good luck in my contest

  • Deadmans Heart
    May 15, 2008
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    amazing!!!


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    April 16, 2008
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    BREATH TAKING

    I don't think I have ever read a poem that has moved me as much as this one his...your words held me captive from beginning to end...I felt as though I was walking with you and apart of all you saw! niaish so much for sharing this with me and for entering