**If you have a weak stomach...stop reading now**
I choose the weapon of my choice
And slowly bring it to my chest
I carve a sweet, deep line straight across
My hands shaking from the pain this causes
I slowly peel the skin back
And search inside me
My fingers feel wetness
I begin to search
I am now numb from all the pain
My vision becoming blurry
I've found what i'm looking for
I slowly rip my heart out
Stomach churning from the noises my heart makes
As it's being ripped from body
I now have my heart in my hand
Oddly enough, i'm not disgusted
I hold the heart, still beating, in front of me
The heart, once whole, was yours
Now you have broken it
And I don't want it anymore
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awesome girl i'm not a squemish one and i love the imagry you created kudos
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I have to say, I found this quite disturbing and hard to read. Thank you and good luck.
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nooooo i dont want you to have a broken heart!!!!*quickly bandages her heart then puts it back in her b4 she has an exessive amount of blood loss* i love you to much and care for you to much to loss you or your heart
if its not worken right now ill give you mine
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your segways through the action of the piece are way too abrupt. you may also want to consider line breaks.
first line is redundant. "choosing" the weapon of your "choice."
it got a bit of a reaction out of me, but the end really killed it. nothing really morbid about the old broken heart, self-mutilization, i hate life routine.
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This is very graphic and interesting, it made me slightly sick which isn't easy to do. Well written, thank you for the entry. ~T~
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Wow... This reminded me of this pic I have seen before. It was creepy. So was this. anywayz.... Great poem. Really potrays the heartbreak nicely. Great write. ^.^
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