You can stop me in my tracks with a single glane
your eyes send more messages then words ever could.
I wonder if you know how I feel about you
I'll wait paitently for you to come around.
When you go home to her, I'll be here alone
waiting for my heart to gain its life.
I wonder if you can see through my smile and
into my heart thats beating for a lifetime with you.
But if that never happens, I'll be content.
Knowing that you feel like you can depend on me,
to pick you up when life isn't going your way.
I'll be there to support you when noone is there,
willing to fight on your side.
I'll be the greatest fan of your life.
Author notes
Inspired by the lyrics from Edwin McCain's song "I'll Be"
A contest entry
- Amazed by You in this Heat of the Moment by Rock-Junkie.
410 points, ended March 24, 2008, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Worthy of Gold by Virgoan.
900 points, ended April 17, 2008, 73 entries
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Comments
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very simple yet heartfelt.
loved the mediocity of this work.
Thanks for sharing and keep writing.
HENSLEY
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first off, you have two typos. "glane" (i'm assuming) you meant "glance" and "paitently" should be "patiently"; other than that, this was a good piece. i love that edwin mccain song. and you did a good job sticking to that theme.
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wow! thank you so much for the gold! I love the edwin mccain song and I think it's so beautifully sad... I am glad you enjoyed it because I enjoyed writing it
also, thanks for the writing tip,
next time i'll use the spell check
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aww. I really like this. follows the song really well and its sweet.
great job and good luck
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