I'm on my back in long
whispering
fragrant grass
watching clouds
scudding by
I throw my
arms outstretched
the scents
the colours
transfix me
my heart
implodes
and yet, still,
I have
a way to go
before my way to go.
Author notes
Honey, I've been hugging trees all my life - they are all sick of me. I've told them and told them how much I love them and they stand so still and mute. Now and then they throw a branch or an acorn on me. I just don't know what else to say to make them care for me.
A contest entry
- Quote-inspired (words on the fridge) by Ja Vorbesc.
700 points, ended April 6, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was really uncomplicated but full of imagery and feeling which in my opinion is one of the most enjoyable types of poetry. I read through the comments to see the question that this was in response to and I loved the way you interpreted it and took a unique twist. I liked the ending which for me took a bit of thinking about so left me with a little something extra at the end of the poem. I could really picture being led in long grass, almost hidden, in a really "back to nature" way. It made me really look forward to the spring and summer. It was lovely, well done.
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Thanks for such a lovely comment. I'm glad you liked the ending - it was meant to be a bit of a tease to the contest. Not sure it worked. But I'm still an inveterate tree pesterer. The Forestry Commission are trying to get me arrested for loitering with intent to pester conifers... xx not certain you will find this even remotely funny. Never mind. I will probably die laughing at my own jokes! x
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Ok. That's what I thought it was, but I wanted to make certain!
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But trees never say anything! They're never completely still; look up and you'll find them laughing at you, or if you're sad, they'll smile at you with their branches. They rustle to you, and stand there for you. Don't worry, they love you as much as you love them.
Now, I'm unsure as to what option this is. Perhaps you could clarify?
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sorry I should have said. You messaged me with what would be a cool way to die.
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LOVELY
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Love this, so simple and true. You have a gentle touch with words, they shine for you.
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I enjoy reading your poetry. Simple as that. The thoughts and images are so refreshing compared to the things I usually find when I click the "Poetry" link(Which then requires a great deal of sifting through horribly disturbing material). I just really like your style and your poems are consistently nice, entertaining reads. Keep writing and I'll keep smiling
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