sometimes between the first thaw and the last frost,
i find you, oh sweet spring.
in a symphony of wet clay
i am reborn, sliding from snow into your arms,
dewed and so very green again,
And now I see that you and &
i are more than you
&i,
neither paragraphed not parenthesized,
simply we,
and so so alive
Author notes
I can't really take credit for the last half
"because it's" http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/12409-e-e-cummings-because-it-s
"since feeling is first" http://oldpoetry.com/opoem/7554-e-e-cummings-since-feeling-is-first
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Some of this piece sounded a bit odd, but I can't put my finger on why. Spring is a great topic to write about now, as so many places are so cold that spring would be a welcome sight. I liked how short this work was, yet how well worded it was. It was sweet, and serious, yet fun and carefree. This piece is a wonderfully penned poem. Great job.
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lovely
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touching
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This sounds really great.spring is one of my favorites.Every thing is starting to grow and get warmer.Hope that winter will be over quickly so it can all begin annew.I do not think that I would change anything but maybe add The mist of the rain as it hits my nose is all a part of how it goes.This wonderous thing that we call spring And all the beauty that it does bring.Just an idea.Great job on this though i enjoyed reading this.Glad that i stopped by.
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Ah..a great write indeed..you have revealed the beauty of this life through the wonderful poetry of your internal immageries of life..well done...
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nice write. i can easily see you realy embraced spring in this write. i truely and honestly enjoyed reading this piece. nice work
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i clap you
great job! i can see the link to E. E. Cummings, but you made it your own.
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