What a special gift you gave me
when we first meet
you came to me and asked for the same gift
we both just wanted a friend
now that I look back
you were always right there
when I needed to cry
or when I needed help with my hair
I know i was always there for you
and I treated you well
that's why you kept my gift
and you hold on to it so well
when you thought that I was slipping from you
you pulled me right back
then tied me closer to you
so I will never leave your sight
you once were leaving me
so I called you back
told you never to leave me
or I have no reason for life
you wanted to betray me
but you never did
even when it would benefit you
you thought of me and disagreed
when i wanted to do the same thing
i called god for advise
he told me that i will never have a greater gift
than the love that never lies
know when you say "i love you"
I know that what you say is true
and know that when i way it back
that i care deeply about you.
Author notes
This poem was writing for my friend Bilda! AP name: rosa1106. SHe is the Wierdest friend in the world but she is my wierd friend. And its also for My friend Lizzie Copel! XxGrim-ReaperxX she it Great!
Friendship is born at that moment when one person says to another, "What! You too? I thought I was the only one!"
I am 14 years old.
A contest entry
- Inspired by you for poets 16 and younger by Starz of Heaven.
1750 points, ended June 5, 11 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Peer Pressure (Vote) - 3 (last, if nobody shows interest) by Midnight-x-Rose.
450 points, ended April 2, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - all HM winners! by Cat10.
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Gold trophy winner
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thanks for entering! I found a few things that you can change, if you don't its still a wonderful poem! a few of your "I"s towards the end became lower cased, just I think they should all be "i" or "I", just me though and "when we first meet" since you are in past tense, "meet" should probably be "met" but the poem is wonderful! I don't judge on grammer or spelling or anything like that, just try to help people, cause I like when they help me, you did a wonderful job with this! good luck!
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Great poem about friendship and being devoted to each other even in the hard times. Good luck in the contest!
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True friends totally rock.
I am blessed to have many. Your poem was sweet, true and just a joy to read. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest!
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A fantastic dedication and beautifully written. Well done.
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This is very sweet, and it still rings true to me, even in my twenties. Friendship is something special, that should always be treated with respect, and your friends are indeed very lucky to have you. Well done, and good luck!
Laura xxx
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I think this is a beautiful tribute to your friends, and brilliantly executed. I have perhaps one critique about this poem, however. In the last stanza, the third line went like "and know that when i way it back". Perhaps I am just being a little dense, but I have no idea what that means. Perhaps you meant to write it like that, but I'm not sure. Any way, that is the only thing that threw the flow off a bit. Other than that, it was a great poem. Great job and good luck.
Hugs and kisses,
Tiphanie -
I loved this poem. It was beautiful. =]
Great dedication. This was really good
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This really reminds me of my now boyfriend. lol I thought that this was a really nice poem. Keep up the great job. I did enjoy this.
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awsome poem loved how it flowed an drew out
i dont have many true friends........
it makes me think if i had...
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Friends are very special This was a wonderful Dedication. Good luck with it in the contest hope you get lots f votes. >.<
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I really like this poem it is a sweet dedication to someone that you care about. My only advice would be is to make the letter I's all uppercase in your poem you have some lowercase ones in there.Thank you for taking the time to enter this contest much love
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A gorgeous tribute to friends. All the best in the contest with it
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Great write my dear. I know Lizzie, and she's a great girl. Good write.
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good poem
I thought this was a great work, and described an interesting friendship with it's ups and downs. I however am brutally honest, good poem, but there are a few spelling mistakes. Fix those and it's a masterpiece. Good work. -
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I think i got some of them but if theres anything i missed. please tell me!
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