Because I cannot write these words
And the flowers you gave me all withered away,
In the fields where we met our match and ending.
I think I used to know you,
But once we got our hits you were a rainbow,
The rotten syrup stench drifted and we inhaled.
I buried you under my pillow and we were
whirling and whirling.
And at the end of it, there is always a silence.
Author notes
CRASH.
i don't know why everything relates back to drugs with me.
i
don't
know
about
this.
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Wow. this is so raw. I love this. You are suhc a an amazing story teller. and this story really hits me deep.
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a good piece of poetry, i would not have thought about drugs at all if i had not seen your author notes, i thought more about love, though i guess we love drugs at times.
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indeed, we do.
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-In the fields were we met our match and ending.
where.
-I buried you under my pillow
my favorite. that line made me drool.
well done.
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Gorgeous.
It tinges me with sadness though, for a certain time of my life that has ended. Who knows, if I'm lucky (or) unlucky enough, I'll start again.
Kudos to you.
But once we got our hits you were a rainbow,
The rotten syrup stench drifted and we inhaled.
I buried you under my pillow and we were
whirling and whirling.
And at the end of it, there is always a silence.
Best part!
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hopefully lucky enough to not start again.
<333
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But once we got our hits you were a rainbow,
The rotten syrup stench drifted and we inhaled.
that line was it for me. also, i liked how short it was...and the end was powerful. i love this. but not nearly as much as i love you, girlie. ♥
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i know about this. this is gorgeous. especially "but once we got our hits you were a rainbow"
imagery is top notch.
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i totally loved the rotten syrup referrence; that was gold
the shortness as well did it for me, & really honey i mean if you can write about that in this way i feel it could be seen more of as a detoxing of your thoughts you know? i cant even touch matters like this in my writing because it frightens me so i believe your pretty damn brave, keep at it hun
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In a way this si a sad write but it reflects exactly what drugs does to the human body it does just crash it until it eventually burns completely out and yes then nothing but silence as there is nothing left but the ashes left behind in a casket to remember. excellent write here on what happens (Brian)
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i don't know about this either.
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hmm, i'll remove and think about adding another one.
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okay
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