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Silent Actor

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Silent Actor

I am the poet that speaks with my quill
and I’m hiding behind this paper veil.
I’m not to be seen yet I bend your will
as I reach in your soul imposing a thrill.

I can write a verse and watch it impale
as an arrow that’s drawn from a quiver.
I can pierce your heart making you flail
instilling my thoughts, in vivid detail.

Reading my verse I can make you shiver
or make you feel cozy, loving and warm.
With pen in hand I try to deliver
feeding your mind like a flowing river.

With my fluent words I try to inform,
yet here I stay and I’m hidden from view.
I write my poems and keep them in form.
I’m your silent actor, watch me perform.

I’ll bend your mind with words that ensue
as I twist the feelings within your soul.
When you read my poems; I will own you
and there’s nothing on Earth that you can do.

 

 

 

Author notes

Modified Interlocking Rubáiyát
The rubai (plural rubaiyat) is a Persian verse form. Each rubai stanza is a quatrain, in which lines 1, 2 and 4 all rhyme. The rhyme scheme interlocks stanza to stanza: aaba, bbcb. ccdc ...

Art work by: Jim Warren

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  • RuthKephart
    April 4, 2008
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    Just back for another look


  • Ithica silver member
    April 4, 2008

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    I'll say!!! It is impossible to read your words and not be touched or inspired on some level!!! You are truly a master of the craft!!!


  • AmazinJason
    March 31, 2008
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    awesome


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 28, 2008

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    Nice entry for this contest. Well done with the Interlocking Rubáiyát as well. I do love this form. Best of luck. This is just so good. ~Pamela


  • hoodoolover silver member
    March 27, 2008

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    This is a really amazing form, I shall have to try it. I like this very much, it's evokative and goes so well with the picture, nicely done!


  • wishintreeUK
    March 23, 2008

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    I have not come across this form before, however that does not mean it does not exist... I also find it pleasant reading, good flow and choice of words.

    Well done and best wishes for the contest.

    Katie


  • Haunting Whispers
    March 22, 2008

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    Wow, this poem is like the poem of all writers. Brilliant flow and astounding words. I love the beginning. Great poetry.


  • PerVirtuous
    March 22, 2008

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    I can vouch for the truth of this.... I have seen many a zombie knocking at your door... I try to shoo them away... but there are so many and they are so devious... My sword is ever ready! This is another classic. Great work.

  • RuthKephart
    March 22, 2008

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    I don't profess to knowing a thing about this form, modified or not, but I do know excellent use of meter and rhyme when I see it and this poem certainly fits that bill I enjoyed this piece from start to finsih and found it flowed as smooth as a gentle stream. Best wishes in the contest and thank you for this entry
    Ruth


  • BehindTheShadow
    March 22, 2008
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    Great poem, and nice form as well. A job well done.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    March 22, 2008
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    No bull - it's good.


  • HaleyMary
    March 22, 2008

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    This is beautiful, Sis. Wonderful flow and poetic form. You certainly have a knack when it comes to different forms of poetry. I liked the title of this piece. It seemed metaphorical and I think can hold a lot of truth for a lot of us on this site. It is like we are silent actors in a sense. We write the words on paper and post them here and even though we aren't face to face the messages from our poems are still shared. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.


  • Faeryn
    March 22, 2008

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    This is so true. Excellent poem, Amera. I love the line:
    "I’m your silent actor, watch me perform"

    Love,
    Tay


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 22, 2008

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    It is now officially a form because there are two poems in it!

    A brand new form in which to try to write
    Amera has constructed something new
    I like to work with forms all shiny bright
    And see if I can make them sound just right

    The Persians like line three to sound askew
    But that is not the way this poem goes
    Amera has the break at her line two
    That is a very different thing to do

    I hope she will not mind the way I chose
    To put her creativity on sight
    It is not such a bad thing I suppose
    To try a form and see if it then grows

    How's that?
    I like the sound, it is more "poppy" that a Rubaiyat.
    You are too clever by half.


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 22, 2008

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    I keep teetering to this side of poetry...it calls to me, "Come on! You can do it!" but then, I read your work and I am immediately intimidated! lol You are the best of the best, my friend. This is just another jewel in your treasure chest... love, lane


    • JohnnyD gold member
      March 22, 2008
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      don't be intimidated, you can be one of the best, just believe in yourself

      besides Amera is really an Elf

    • Amera gold member
      March 22, 2008
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      *smile* Aww… thanks: You can do it I’ve read your rhyming poetry. You write the poem then you play with it. Allan and I coined a word for it, it’s called “tweekage”.

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