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The Leaf Upon A Sidewalk

The leaf upon a sidewalk
Like an unbroken heart
Inside a
  battered
body
Blood pulsing through
  its veins.

A contest entry

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  • sparkling-assassin
    March 25, 2008

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    wow. i can honestly say im not mcuch a fan of short poems but i like this =]]
    It makes me think
    great write.
    Peace,
    mariah=]


  • Three Doves
    March 22, 2008

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    It truly is amazing the different views seen from the same prompt. I love your take. Peace in light and love. Be well. Congratulations on the award.


  • intanglio2ring
    March 22, 2008
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    Bringing yours to life!

    Wonderful interpretation of the picture!
    Tang


  • Kelli Marie
    March 22, 2008

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    A short write, but I love the imagery you have given the reader. Great job. Good luck in the contest. Nice.
    Kelli


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    March 22, 2008

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    This is cleaver it shows the leaf is still alive and like a frail body it is slowly dying great poem (Brian)


  • luna-midnight gold member
    March 22, 2008

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    intresting write....
    i like it, nice interpretation of the pic.
    good luck in the contest
    take care
    stephanie =)

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