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Questions

Will someone love me
Listen to my gentle screaming
Will someone hurt me
Listen to my broken crying

These questions
Only slice me more
I'm bruised inside
I've burned alive


Will someone hold me
Listen to my screams of misery
Will someone murder me
Listen to cries of agony

These questions
Only plague me more
I've died inside
I'm torn alive

Tell me the truth but be kind

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  • oneal
    September 6, 2008

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    well put

    awe, you are smooth sounding in this poem. and in the beginning, I like, cause you shown both sides the good and the bad. and then chosen one throughout your stanza begins.

    wonderful.

    Oneal


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    June 22, 2008

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    Oh, dearie. This is so incredibly beautiful and heartbreaking.
    hope you are doing okay.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    March 23, 2008

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    Piercing write...so bold of you fearless poetess!

    You always write with such strong passion and fearless
    courage. I am so proud of you! You are becoming a
    remarkable poet and person with bold strength!
    So much compassion and understanding will you be able
    to give to a world that truly needs you so!
    It's time for you to reach out HIGHER, get involved in
    one of our groups, you are being prepared powerfully
    to be one of the "whisperers" the ones that hear the
    need, the hearts cries..and knows just how to comfort
    their soul...because you have been their and are fighting
    too...to come through must powerfully!
    ears2hearyou
    Kathleen/Seattle.

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    March 22, 2008

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    Certainly a cry for love that's for sure. But you shouldn't dwell on that. You don't need to have someone by your side holding your hand in order to be confident. Self confidence comes from our hearts; not from who we go out with. Sure it's nice to have someone to love by our side but that's just a bonus. The real essence of happiness is believing wholeheartedly in who we are no matter what. Anyway a longing filled poem. Honest and expressive.
    Brian


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    March 22, 2008

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    A sad dark write that crys out with a need to be loved and understood. it leaves the reader with a sadness felt within their heart as every one should be able to feel and be loved a good write here all the best to you (Brian)

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