You had no right to judge me,
My ways are different than yours.
Always acting better than the rest,
Your not better than them.
I never spread any rumors,
Your insicurity, twisting your mind.
The slow process of fear,
Controlling your every thought, every movement.
May God give me the strength and courage to leave you,
For this torture is truely unbearable.
I do not wish you the worst,
For that burden may be to hard to bear.
If I wish
And only one wish,
I only wish for you to leave
And never come back again.
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This was written after yet another dream. A man, Betraying my trust and love...But I cannot grieve for it was only a dream.
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wow i really like that thanks for the comment about the keira knightly comment
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I definately agree with you here, this is a strong piece and you are saying the words sometimes I long to say, but somehow don't have the strength to utter.
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Great work on a painful subject. The imagery and metaphores were spot on. You brought across the deepest emotions with artistry. Thanks for the great read.
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a very good write, if you hadnt of mentioned it, i really wouldn't've guessed it was inspired by a dream because of the depth of emotion you have put into it. great job!
and also, thanks heaps for your comment on my poem, i really appreciate it! -
A good write dreams can have a bad habbit of portraying our greatest fears in life and I think one would be for most people the fear of being betrayed in love. a good subject matter that most people would probably relate such fears too well done (Brian)
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