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Yellow Crayon


I'll paint you the brightest lovesong,
echoing my heart,
forever etched
in soft rose petals

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Prompt - Yellow Crayon

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  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    March 22, 2008
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    How serenely expressive.. x

  • Evangelistt
    March 22, 2008

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    Brief

    Quite lovely and crisp. Expressing an emotion/feeling in 4 lines. The only thing I might say is that the last line does not seem to fit/flow with the first three.
    Overall something of a change from long poems that drag on. And on.
    I enjoyed it.