Perfect;
the blend of
wax and tint,
that flows like silk.
I color;
“yellow sun”
A contest entry
- A little prompt... by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended March 22, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very nice. I like the imagery and your word choice. I hope you do well in the contest. Good luck to you.
Kelli
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this is very nicely done, told very well indeed...PK
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Well penned, good luck in the contest. Great imagery and flow in this great piece.
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can be very nice thoughts
so unrough as coming out of clouds of blandness
I feel a quiet dawning of mind in artistry but possibly about a street where it had natural shine spreading delicately, and it reminds me of a poem my ma-in-law loves to bring up if with brief repetoire. I can't quote it myself though nor wake her ha-ha but it's principle was I can't write a poem as well as a tree is made. we have some material of beauty but not always the necessity included for pretty resonance without repercussions.
not to say your missive was a mistake, I can see the cycles of creativity's sheets turned for shades of this.
I probably bumped into a nightmare in your dreamy write,
babies are my subject -
You've taken something so simple and turned it into creativity and immaculate imagery... x
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This is so lovely to read. I enjoyed the imagery you have used here, it flowed so well and was such a pleasure to read. All the best for the contest.
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Wonderful imagery..so soothing and upbeat!! Wonderful entry!!
good luck
pri
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"flows like silk"
The entire poem flows like silk...it sounds effortless and natural and happy w/o going overboard.
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