didn't think we can be robbed of
weather but there is the chem cam,
objective box
Author notes
Prompt ~ Yellow crayon
good luck inverts; Isaiah 65:11
please comment by a useful streak,
without unnatural emoticons NOR the applause at all, thank you
A contest entry
- A little prompt... by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended March 22, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
sunny skies...
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Well you've got me searching my brain again ~ on that trek of thought you often send me down. I am going to read this a lot, there's something about it that shall call me back for more... x
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splayed
Lavender Butterfly with good paper blankets
thanks so much, I'm glad my contrast carried something; and it didn't drop by not placing but as a spot on your avatar "searching... brain again" meaningfully. I wasn't bursting into assumption yet basic.
this involved layers for me even from initial write, from barium and aluminum barely articulated lated by husband about what's artificially added to atmosphere barring droughts but catching birds off guard it looks like; and then whole more complex information added on my chemical sensitivity woes of seeing world cooperatively and then just passively overwhelmed anyway to show a miscarriage it seems streams...
your competition does move me to be a commentor also increasingly than a competitor though by that catching up --
babies are my subject
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Nice
Very creative piece, nicely written. Good luck in the contest. -
...sorry about the emoticons. It was habit.
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majorly nice
phantasyintrigue by eye and ear I can tell a little
thank you for your stopping by with specifics for this and me. I do like to perceive a clap by speech here rather than a thunderous icon so to speak... and I heard yours better than pre·cip·i·tate·ly but well put.
your review was kind and standardly inclined with exceptions allowed I guess. I spoke from my point of view that was reaction with no-no's of news, so to change that might've taken me out of my context's strength. that may be neither here nor there for a short write.
thanks for the complimenting quoting, and the sweet revising of your slips of smileys for me. no discoloration of your apology found --
I aim to involve your work on my list of things to do,
babies are my subject
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No applause? Well, if you hadn't specified, I would've given you some, because this poem is unique and definitely applause-worthy.
I find it interesting that you use the present tense, which is rare. Although this is unique, I think it would have sounded better in the past tense.
"objective box"
Great phrase. Really.
*gives applause virtually*
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