lost in the whisper of your sighs
breathless for a glance, a look
to know you see me as I see you
need and longing tangible
not heeding warnings as they come
set on my path of wanting you
to hold you close now and forever
aching for your touch
right from wrong my mind rejects
I feel myself drowning in you
essence fading into nothingness
a shadow of myself
I come alive when you breathe my name
each moment with you my awakening
from the slumber of impatience
how long must I wait
come to me, my love, hold me
as our hearts beat a tattoo
for now I live within you
no more of me, only us
Author notes
Prompt:-
Have you ever loved someone so much you didn't care what happened to yourself?
You just had to be with them. If they look at you, your heart stops.
If you feel their breath on your skin, you just ache.
Have you ever craved someone so much you didn't exist anymore?
In a list
A contest entry
- Quote Prompt by Perfectly Imperfect.
300 points, ended April 1, 2008, 24 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is beautiful, exactly the kind of write I was hoping for I love what you've taken from the prompt. Well done and thank you for taking the time to enter x
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Great take on the prompt--well written & Versed!
--Best of luck in the contest, and May you and your family have a Blessed & Happy Easter!
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Beautiful
A very beautiful poem indeed especially the last verse
so cleverly worded and refreshingly romantic I enjoyed
reading every part of it. It left me all warm inside
Best Wishes George (JUDMC)
Can I tempt you with my "Peter's Girl" see what you think.Many thanks for your kind comments on "Little Girl" -
oh mummy this is such a stunnig piece that speaks on many levels of love and longing. you words are pure and strong with such a sweet essence. i love this piece well done mummy
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Beautiful
Stunningly-beautiful piece this is. So full of emotion. The 'need' is so apparent here. It seems that you have poured your all into this piece of writing. Well done indeed.
Love
Wayne Leon
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You have a very keen soul my dear, very perceptive indeed; all the makings of a poet; and this is brilliant. As for the Author notes, I have been there many times, and presently enjoy such feelings. Best of luck in the contest dear.
Love and peace,
mj.
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Beautiful
A beautiful and emotional poem. This poem cries out with the need to be with that special someone. When we fall in love the heart certainly does rule things that we do. Be patient and if it is meant to be it will happen great write all the best Brian.
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