My breath fades as if taken away,
then,
deepens in response;
heart pounding,
begging relief,
echos as drums beating in
my ears.
My eyes, unblinking,
memorizing,
every detail a highlight.
My mouth, dry as desert sand,
my voice uncontrollable,
a stammer.
Desire rules my thoughts,
I imagine a scene,
private,
then suddenly,
it is gone.
It was the ring,
the ring that untied my
tongue,
no longer a fear of stammering,
I return to normal,
going my way with only a
lingering thought;
She was not just hot,
She was Stutter Hot!
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- Sizzling Hot by Fire-Fly.
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I'd say that was one HOT MAMA to make one, "Stutter Hot"
Very enjoyable read this morning; thank you for sharing
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Made me smile.. love your writings and the way you articulate Hugs Angel
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VERY ENJOYABLE
this poem is so cute and funny as I see it is mutual, ! nice poem
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....thats funny, nice write, and take care
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loool
veryyyyyy cuteeeeeeee
juliet
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funny and well written. Nice job
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well... being as i am a female, i will decline any comments on the girl. you did a great job on the write. thank you for sharing this with me tonight and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the very near future. viyanna rosemarie
ps--great background!
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hmm great job1
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Wow! Lol
Talk about leaving an impression! You made this scene as clear as day and where can we buy this shirt?
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Wow! Your poem took my breath away. This is freaking amazing. The descriptiveness and imagery was wonderful!
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Never heard it put like that before. Loved it!
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Hey, this poem really stirs the mind, I know it's not supposed to be intellectual but it just races along so well that I found my thoughts 'jumping'.
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No harm.
That is no harm in looking I guess. And well the background of this one is beautiful. I think that you can write some pretty interesting pieces here. Oh tell me what is Stutter Hot, do you stutter like a little kid? -
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Thanks for the wonderful comments. Stutter Hot is a new concept for our new clothing and apparrel line. It means something exceptional and applies to just about any subject. Since many stutter when they get overly excited about something, hence, Not Just Hot, Stutter Hot. Again thanks for the visit and comments.
Mac
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What an amazing phot..you can almost talk to the girl, she comes through so clearly..and your words make it seem as if she is almost here in front of me..I'd better send her back before my husband starts stuttering!
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Lovely thoughts - sentiments well expressed in these lines. Beautiful young girl - love that shirt and the Stutter Hot - fits in nicely with the poem. Liked the flow and the feelings that many of us have had growing up when we see someone that really interests us.
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