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Beauty In Zero

Bones bleed through broken skin
as mirror and scale lies once again,
looking for size in infinite nothing
which can't be found.

choking on vomit of half eaten food
looking for something from within.

How much longer before I'm beautiful?

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  • flaed
    June 8

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    i think you should get rid of the line wich cant be found.
    we all know it cant be found and you say that inyour peom, i dont think you need to actually SAY it


  • MissCDT
    June 1

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    Oh my goodness, this is beautiful. With so few words you have portrayed the angst and worry of teenage girls everywhere. Great write.


  • flaed
    May 26
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    I like this poem a lot. really good write.
    i dont know what to say.


  • TeenageTears
    October 22, 2008
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    Very deep! Awesome write! Adored the last line.
    TeenageTears


  • Butterfly.Wingz
    September 28, 2008

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    oh this is so deep beautifully written thanks so much for this entry...I can relate to this ALOT and i sympathize with you pain... the wording in the first stanza is awsome thanks again
    xox
    Tasha


  • Tam
    March 23, 2008

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    oh...this is so painful...

    to read sis...it rips my heart out...
    so many souls suffer with this very dark struggle...
    beauty is in the eyes of the beholder...but if the beholder does NOT see reality...how do you make them see truth?
    this is an excellent write on a tragic illness...
    as always your ink paints light into the darkness...
    Love, Tammy
    xoxo


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    March 22, 2008

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    It's very sand and haunting, but the echo of many people who just want to be beautiful and think that's the only way. That's because the press tell them it is. Nicely done.


  • Puppydog gold member
    March 22, 2008

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    SO SAD BUT TRUE!!!

    Some years ago this was very common but now one seldom hears of it like they used to. Lets hope everyong will see the beauty in each of us no matter how big or small we are.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    March 22, 2008

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    So sad that people just can't see that they are beautiful
    Everyone is We are created by God and are his children He thinks wwe are too. Says some where we are a temple as God as well and should not harm ourselves. Ecellent write Dear Good luck


  • PrInCeSsOfRoCk gold member
    March 21, 2008

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    wow...that is just so amazing....i have never experienced anorexia myself but i can imagine this would be how someone struggling with it would feel...that last line was just so powerful. i loved it.


  • SerenityNChains gold member
    March 21, 2008

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    This screams of sadness and pain. I know someone that should see this. Too see someone you care for torture themselves is awful. This is such a sad and poignant. Wonderful in its sadness my friend.

    Blessed be,
    Billie Jean:


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    March 21, 2008

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    Many many can relate to this here girl. Wonderfully done. Wishing you the best.

    Love ya sis

    Passions

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