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Centaurian

The flame on this auspicious night
was transformed into fear
He felt the passionless torment
of the down trodden
Heard the speechless lamentation
of the unpitied peons


His spirit was heightened by their pain...


Now, this Centaurian, is Hope's only Savior ~


Set unawares 'tween Scylla and Charybdis
He must rain arrows of annihilation
at Mephistopheles menaced  'eye of the storm'

Sweat of thoughts trickle down his brow...

He rears, hooves brandishing bravado
before a wasteland awash in rock and sand
Arrow afire, on a bow no other man could draw
 
He prays that God's plan, and his aim... are True

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Artwork by H.P. Kolb

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  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    April 9, 2008

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    PageTurner

    very well thought out nice little tale congrats on the silver thanks you for commenting


  • Desire gold member
    April 1, 2008

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    Wonderful!!

    Magnificent piece You have penned and Love the tale told

    Set unawares 'tween Scylla and Charybdis
    He must rain arrows of annihilation
    at Mephistopheles menaced 'eye of the storm'
    These lines grabbed~~

    Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
    -Throws confetti-
    Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo


    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • ShelleyA gold member
    March 31, 2008

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    Good title. A very good write and interpretation of the picture prompt. A very good story with the feel of legends. Good imagery, flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, alliteration and assonance. Thank you for your entry.


  • penman gold member
    March 21, 2008
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    Excellent

    Such a creative poem for the picture. A truly gifted story. Bes of luck in the contest.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    March 21, 2008

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    Great job. This is a very nice take on the prompt. It is classical and adventurous. The last five lines were great. I could almost smell the scene and feel the heat.


  • Confusedboy
    March 21, 2008

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    thoughtful

    fabulous thoughts. fantastic in developing mysteries of time past. love the ancient times, fables and such. you served us well, conveying thoughtful ideals that causes one to ponder and reflect. is this real, or imaginary?

  • ecrivain01
    March 21, 2008
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    Very nice ...

    I see Wanda thinks so too. Good job all the way 'round.


  • Night Hope gold member
    March 21, 2008

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    "He rears, hooves brandishing bravado
    before a wasteland awash in rock and sand
    Arrow afire, on a bow no other man could draw"

    This is my newest favorite of yours, Poet. Great penning, drawn from an amazing picture. Good luck in the contest, my Friend. Wanda

  • lastlapse
    March 21, 2008

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    reading this poem made me feel the centaur's plight. it's full of emotion and is written very well. i also really enjoyed the part "Set unawares 'tween Scylla and Charybdis He must rain arrows of annihilation
    at Mephistopheles menaced 'eye of the storm'"
    it adds a sense of realism to this fantasy and fits the picture prompt perfectly.


  • tearyeyedbutterfly
    March 21, 2008
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    This is very nice and fits the prompt well!


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 21, 2008

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    What an unusual picture to write a poem for. Quite the inspiration you received from this prompt. Great verbiage and alliteration throughout these lines. Wishing you well in this contest.

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