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This Pain

This pain I feel is killing me
And it's tearing up my soul.
It's not just over him
Who hurt me long ago.

Everything I say or do
Comes back to haunt me in some way.
If I forget to pray,
I'm sad and depressed the very next day.

I feel abandoned by everyone,
Which doesn't just include God.
I feel like everyone hates me,
Especially when I stay standing on Gospel sod.

Most of the pain I feel,
Comes from the guy.
The one who broke my heart,
And this love I feel won't let me by.

I hate my life and this pain,
I just want it to end.
But I have to much here to live for,
So that idea just wouldn't bend.

My sister picks fights with me,
And the teeth marks she leaves,
Well they just don't stay...
Not long enough to show my parents anyway.

Everytime I do something wrong,
Immediately the yelling begins.
I close my ears and eyes
Just to block out the evil grins.

I hate this life I have,
I hate it so much.
But the love I feel for this guy just adds on.
Please, this pain is too much.

Author notes

This is about what/how I feel... for Daniel, about my friends... i feel abandoned and alone and unloved... i feel hated and i'm so filled with ungratefulness and depression all the time. i absolutely hate it!

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  • HereComesTheSun
    April 28, 2008

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    ik the feeling of alone but the sun alawys comes out tomarrow && as a good friend told me when youve hit rock bottem all you can do is go up


  • Darkend
    April 2, 2008
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    Ouch

    This poem made me hurt just by reading it. Its so raw and in your face. Well done!


  • BluRosePoet8488
    March 26, 2008
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    Very nice. I can relate to this one very much. The feeling of being alone. The pain it causes.SOunds like myself, in a way. Great job! Keep the ink flowing and good luck! Love and hugs...
    ~Donna~


  • JustAnOrdinaryGirl
    March 21, 2008
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    Its a nice poem. I like it. The pain is deep yes...i feel it. Good luck


  • BluRosePoet8488
    March 21, 2008

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    Nothing to fix so far. Can't wait 'til it's finished though. Then I can make a better comment.
    ~Donna~

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