The rain,
Falling lightly,
On the warm autumn leaves.
Winter,
But just around the corner.
Tall Trees,
Looming over the mountain.
Sun,
Setting on the horizon.
What a beautiful sight
This be.
The heavy breeze,
The swaying trees...
Oh,
How I wish I could stay
In this natural
World around us.
Author notes
This poem is in for gold.
A contest entry
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I love the natural world with almost all my heart. What do you truly think of my work?
Comments
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that was beautiful
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Sweet flow, nice piece. Simple, but beautiful and wonderfully calming. I hope you do get a gold soon, you deserve it.
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awesome
I love the flow in this piece,thanks for entering. -
An Autumn piece always the season of most change leading us into winter well done
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this is very simple. It's exactly how you felt in the moment, I can see you jotting the words as they came to your mind. I'm glad you like the nature around you.
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very interesting. i really liked it. its beautiful. and you did a great job with imagery
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It made me love the world i loved it. so true. beautiful. made me feel like i was outside. i loves it. lovely.
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Let's get lost in the world of imagery!
I truly think that... well, this is sort of hard to say...
I THINK IT WAS AMAZING!!!
I loved it becuse of the imagery, because of the word choice, because of everything about it. I definitely thihnk you should keep writing and you should at least get gold from three of those contests. this was very nicely done with a lovely finish. Great job, loooooved it!
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~Pandy
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Very discriptive, I like it.
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Beautiful poem. I really imagined being there in that moment. Thank you very much for your entry
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Excellent read and you gve some beautiful metaphors in this colabe. Thanjk you for sharing....novy
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I'm very impressed that you've actually been three people writing this piece. I'm no good at collaborating, so I'm impressed with your gift. The piece is very well written, and I love how descriptive and vivid it is. It almost traps the reader in the illusion. Good job!
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nice, something i try to put in to words but fail to make it just right its very good
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a very nice description. thank you for sharing and keep on writing!
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Well you described nature in a beautiful manner, in all greatness and splendor. excellent.
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I'm not really sure where this poem fits in my contest. It's not really a tale of the mysterious. It's not what I was looking for in my contest. Would it be possible for you to remove it from my contest please, and enter another more suited to the theme of the contest? Thank you,
Dari xxx -
I thought this was a beautiful piece, I love poetry about nature, it's nowhere near as common as love or heartbreak or any of those topics...
This was truely a beautiful piece, very well done with this, thanks for entering and good luck. -
You're very observant of your natural surrounding. I find this to be beautiful, and it gives the readers of this a small view into your mind. I really enjoyed reading this.
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Nature is wonderful inspiration. I really like your poem, but I do think you should fix the capitalization. Since you are using punctuation, capitalizing every line is awkward. You paint a pretty picture, I can feel that breeze in my hair. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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Please read the rules and make the appropriate changes. =)
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beantiful
very good think you may need to edit it a bit, -
Beautiful!
When you started with the rain and that being refreshing and renewing, I knew it was going to be great. Alas, my contest only called for 20 words, but best of luck in all the other contest! -
very nice job! I don't read many poems about nature, but this one is very nice
good job and good luck in all of your contests!
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The rain,
Falling lightly,
On the warm autumn leaves.
Winter,
But just around the corner.
Tall Trees,
Looming over the mountain.
Sun,
Setting on the horizon.
What a beautiful sight
This be.
The heavy breeze,
The swaying trees...
Oh,
How I wish I could stay
In this natural
This is beautiful I wish I could stay in this natural world around us . Thank you for sharing your poem with the group good luck in the contest
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Nice poem.The light words you used, makes feel good to read after a boring,stressful day.
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Thank you for your entry
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This is wonderful, I love how it is written, and how it gives the reader just a glimpse of the seasons and nature, but calls up deep memories to fill in the blanks. At least, it did for me. Beautiful.
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This is a really cool poem, short but sweet. The only part that I would suggest rewritting is:
What a beautiful sight
This be.
I know you were trying to be all neat and formal by changing the "This is" to "This be" but it doesn't always work and I don't think it works this time. This is a really neat poem, thank you for entering.
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Nice write, what a beautiful world we're destroying.
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A tender heart's labor my dear with a delightful flow.
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oh what a great work of art this is.. I could feel the ambience as if i was right there.. there is a nice steady flow in the poem and a good portrayal of nature's beauty.. thanx for sharing..
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