The Crucifixion of Jesus Hinks
Jesus took another toke and ran another light.
His whiskey glass tipped over in his crotch.
"Holy shit!" he screamed. "Is there ain't nothing going right?"
He took some beans and glared down at his watch.
The cop car siren started screaming out at him to stop.
He jumped and jabbed the gas down wickedly.
"Of all the luck it has to be that stupid asshole cop.
All he wants is to crucify me."
I pulled my seat belt tighter and I said a little prayer.
We sailed around a corner on two wheels.
Most on our side we nailed that concrete lamppost fair and square.
It's crazy how a dying engine squeals.
Well, Jesus was ejected and they found him on the fence.
They say that he felt nothing when he died.
I can say that I was witness, with no false pretense
The day that Jesus Hinks was crucified.
Author notes
It's the Mexican spelling of Jesus, sounds like Hey Zeus.
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oh Larry this is really not you.
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Was.
In my 3rd childhood.
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At least your Jesus didn't die in vain. The well-known one certainly did, as no one care about him any more.
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The well known one....
That must be Jesus Jones. Dang; I hate it when we lose good musicians.
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Holy Moly,,, it is a GOOD FRIDAY isn't it? cause I got
to read this wholy blasphemous poem and laugh my ass off!!! bless you my friend! and tell Jesus to hang in there will ya!
laurie
P.S. why do they call today, Good Friday? when it seems to me the start of some VERY bad days for
Jesus? just wondering?
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Maybe it was good
for everybody else?
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I knew that. ;)
This is humorous in a macabre sort of way. You put the final set of quotation marks after me, but it should be after squeal.
All he wants is to crucify me."
(the s.o.b. wants to crucify me)
would work better, but it's your poem. That's what I'd do. Otherwise, not bad.
Thanks for entering.
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The quotation is,
"Of all the luck it has to be that stupid asshole cop.
All he wants is to crucify me."
The rest is narration.
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Stop and think ...
about that. Then read the next lines:
I pulled my seat belt tighter and I said a little prayer.
We sailed around a corner on two wheels.
Most on our side we nailed that concrete lamppost fair and square.
It's crazy how a dying engine squeals.
That is Jesus talking. If it were from the observer's point of view, it would be
He pulled his seat belt tighter and said a little prayer.
He sailed around a corner on two wheels.
Most on the side, he nailed that concrete lamppost fair and square.
It's crazy how a dying engine squeals.
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Really!
It is the person in the passenger seat who is the narrator. He is saying that he knew Jesus, who was driving the car he was in was about to have an accident so he pulled his seat belt tighter. It wasn't Jesus who pulled his seat belt tighter; it was the narrator, ostensibly me.
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