I see a bird…
/But is it really a bird?/
What is it, then
/A crested brooch for the heavens?/
Perhaps.
/A silent witness for this lowly earth?/
I’m not quite sure.
…Can’t it just be a bird?
I watch the sunrise
Tasting a fresh mango…
/And is that all?/
I suppose.
/Can you see nothing else?/
There was a shimmer on the water…
/And?/
It was beautiful.
There is a pear tree dancing in the wind.
I think he is excited.
/Why is that?/
The way he throws pear blossoms into the sky
/What about it?/
They dance as well.
/Is it unique?/
Yes.
/Why?/
It makes me want to dance along.
I take in my hand a box of colours
/Are you making a picture?/
I shall.
/What of?/
A bird,
A sunrise,
A mango,
And a tree.
/Why is that?/
You shall see.
/Will it be enough?/
It is not just them,
For they were my revelation.
They are just doors to open for me
A thousand beautiful sights
Tastes
Emotions.
Then you can see.
Author notes
I first was inspired with the picture. Then Sonja's poem "Exordium" and that dialogue-ish style in the middle. So...well, yah. I like this, but that's just me.
GAH!@!!! Stoopid non-gold membership, forbidding me the use of italics!
A contest entry
- My Anniversary - Your Ode to Poetry by Sonja.
1700 points, ended March 26, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very nice use of imagery! The poem flowed very well for it's abrupt writing style. A nice relaxing, calming writing. You singled out pieces of nature and brought them together at the end. Well done.
Jason -
your very good meagan
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fun to read
interesting flow
i like it
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sweet
I like you brought meaning to the simple things in this writting...I just wrote a new poem and I changed the font so you could read it. Sorry, my poems are so long. I like writting in story form a lot!
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Wow. That is one of the most artistic poems I have read in a while. It was like actually reading a painting. Beautiful all around.
Write on,
~*~
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I am really surprised with all used pictures in your poem. It is like a nice watercolor painting made in the early morning, under the first sun light. Nice. I am touched and honored that my poetry inspired you to write almost the same style.
~Sonja~
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Outstanding
This reminds me of Sonja's style of writing -a great tribute to her. I thought the imagery was fresh and the poem filled with vision and insight. A well-written, thoughtful poem. Best of luck in the contest.
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