I can do it just let go
I can do it, don't say no
I am ready to fly
it's time to say good bye
Open your hand
let my soar
I'll look just grand
I'm ready to explore
You're letting me go
I know to aim high
but I'm plummeting low
and I'm wondering why
Why did you listen to me
how did I know
that I was going to fall
when you let go.
Author notes
http://fikreesprojects.deviantart.com/art/quot-please-just-let-go-quot-80434483
Hope you like it!
This is a story of a teenager or a child urging their parent to let them go and blaming them for their fall when they do. I know most parents can relate.
A contest entry
- Please, just let Go... Picture Prompt by Spiritual Soul.
1100 points, ended April 6, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Our Poor Teenage Hearts by PonyPride.
950 points, ended April 21, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - POETRY MONTH! by WesBreezyxxx.
300 points, ended April 21, 2008, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think?
Comments
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I like the poem but dissagree with your message. Right now I would like more thn anything for my mother to understand my positon,
But as for your poetry, it had both ryhme and grace. It was really a peice of art. Personal opinion of message aside, I am placing your peice with my finalists and will further judge it later.
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Thank you for considering even if you don't like the message within. Really great of you!
Thanks!
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This was wonderful! I loved the take on the prompts and the story was awesome! Thank you so much for entering my contest!!
Blessings,
~Michaela~ -
a good take on the prompt.. a well structured piece.. loved the way it proceeds.. wishing you luck for your future aspirations.. thanx for sharing..
God bless you..
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