Beaded tears
diminishing between
tainted eyes
gazing upon your soul
Author notes
Prompt:
say something meaningful
in only 10 words...
A contest entry
- Speak to me... by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended March 22, 2008, 18 entries
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Silver trophy winner
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Please critique my work if you feel this needs improving
Comments
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This would pretty much say it all like this:
Beaded tears
diminishing
gazing upon your soul
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Well its short thats for sure. I don't like short poems but its good!
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congrats on the silver. I wonder what meaningful means?
It must be different for every person. You did well and thank you for sharing with the library -
wow a great meaningful promt well done on your shiny and thank you for sharing this with the group
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Nicely done for snagging the silver. Very meaningful and deep.
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that is something meaningful, I can tell. such emotion and pain is packed into so few words. I really like this one, I can relate 100%. I have been feeling like this way too much.
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Few lines with much said. Beaded tears and tainted eyes say much about the sadness of this write. Keep writing.
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Lovely imagery. Short and to the point, perhaps it is his soul that is tainted more so than your eyes, thus the tears?
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Deeply engaging... x
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Good Job, confused a bit, but I liked it
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i'm trying to figure out the perfume tainted eyes, besides that i love it. best of luck. be well and be blessed
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