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Beneath

Grieved surfaces always shrivel
to expose a more wounded core

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10 Words

A contest entry

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  • Valley Girl silver member
    March 22, 2008

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    wow! this is a n intense piece in so little words! Great write, and congrats on the HM


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 21, 2008

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    oh wow this so beautifully perfect with such a detailed truth and amazingly unique way of penning it well done bro


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 21, 2008
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  • Kari gold member
    March 20, 2008

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    The last line stings. I think that you've done great in expressing yourself in such a short verse.
    Very powerful indeed. I like the imagery and comparrison with the surfaces.

  • Amarige
    March 20, 2008

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    Wonderful piece..so much said in 10words..great job my friend
    Ruby


  • luna-midnight gold member
    March 20, 2008

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    ickyness
    haha, greatw rite, lovely descriptions, and good lcuk in the contest
    this was wonderful
    take care
    stephanie =)




    *poke*

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