Every morning I wake up
And everything isn’t okay
So I put on a mask
To help me through the day
I fake happiness and calm
To get you to like me
But worry and sorrow
Is my reality
All you see
Is what I want you to
‘cause I’m afraid
You won’t like what I do
All I let you see
Is my own little act
Not my weaknesses
And that’s a fact
‘cause if you believe
That I’m not weak
You’ll like me better
And that’s what I seek
On the outside
I’m strong-I’m a man
But inside I feel
I’m just a scared boy, doing what he can
To you
I have no fears
You will never see
My face stained with tears
But I hate these facts
I Want you to know
So I don’t have to hide
I want my feelings to show
So I ask you
Please try to see
Everything I hide:
The real me
Author notes
1. Name [Real & User]
Jack- Jack22
2. Age
18
3. Amount of Poetic Experience
about four years
4. Typical/Strongest Style
ryming
5. Unusual/Weakest Style
hiku
6. Favorite Type of Inspiration
song
7. Amount of Multiround Experience
little to none
8. Some Accomplishments
I mde it to life scout in the boy scouts
9. One Fact I Don’t Know About You
I live in washington
10. Additional Comments You’d Like Me To Read
none really
A contest entry
- I want to feel your soul!!! by Leanna-bean.
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Comments
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Thank you for entering
I really liked this. I feel like this everyday. It's just comforting to know I'm not the only one. Good luck in the contest
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Oh what to say to such emotion... Mo words can do this piece justice my friend... SO many have felt this way and still do not know how to show the real them..
Great write..
Peace to you, Jetleena -
I will give you an honest comment. I didn't really enjoy the poem. I know that there is a lot of feeling behind this, don't get me wrong, but from a poetic standpoint, it wasn't a stand out.
You "told" more than you "showed." What I mean is that, you didn't use imagery to paint what you're trying to mean. The poem was didactic, or straight forward. You didn't have to search for a meaning. Some people like that, but I do not.
You can revise or enter something else if you wish. :]
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Its a great write. I like how it reveals the hidden part of you. Good Luck =)
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This is really good. I like it a lot! Your rhyming was great and you actually made me sad. Great write! Thanks for the entry and good luck!
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