My soul sings of silence,
a quiet soliloquy.
A silvery sound of paradise,
despite the ringing of seemingly distant frequencies.
I meditate in this,
my infrequent fleeting golden peaceful moment.
The pitter-patter of my two cat's paws
aren't clamorous enough to matter.
I slouch
and daydream
and forget the madness
falling calling crawling
abounding and crushing my happy crashing...
...Oh, no! Now not!
The mind to worry, for a slice of time,
cannot be found.
So satisfying the sporadic sighing and cooing
of my child so comfortably snoozing
that I cannot help to notice
I cannot hear a sound
and so resolutely I retire
and just die inside this,
my seldom enjoyed quiet time.
Author notes
Notes for contest rewrites shall reign [Author name: nitefire~Leah] I hope the random play on rhyme here is not considered "rhyming". if this is not to you liking, APoeticDreamer, I apologize.
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So quiet in here...
so peaceful in here....
Theres a place you go...
to look at yourself...
to absorb all the love around you,
its so hard to get there sometimes,
but i think this poem pointed me in the right direction.
Nice work lassie!
MANY BLESSINGS MY SISTER,
LOWELL POE
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Title: "Peice" would be "Piece" or "Peace"
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I thought that this was okay. It didn't upset me or anything. Next time just check with me before you enter. (Although this contest filled up quickly wow my gosh.)
I think your title was meant as a moments peace not piece. I would change that.
I like the overall flow of this piece. Good luck in the contest. -
This is beautiful without any comment or exception. The picture created will resonate with any person that has the same experience. We grow weary as parents and crave those moments when the world stands still. Would you like to go camping with Jen and I? We can arrange it. The 'piece' is perfect because it is just a slice of a fragmentary moment. We could sit around the campfire after the bedtucking goes on. You would like it, I promise. If you have no children, then you really pulled this off to perfection. If you do, lets sit around the campfire and talk about writing. You think I'm kidding try me. Jen and I are waiting to know. RC
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Glorious imagery. I really "got" this line (from my perspective of course) "despite the ringing of seemingly distant frequencies". Awesome, I often feel as though "life" is buzzing away just outside, but not quite, my "space". I occasionally sense that buzzing out there, almost enough to make me venture out into it...but not quite. Greate write and a joy to read, as usual where your work is concerned.
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I believe your title is supposed to "peace". This is a great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
♥
whisper
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