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The Audacity of Obama

 

 


Long ago,
hope deflated.

Flattened by the
unrelenting weight of realities,
discouraged by rumors
of its impracticality,

It became an artistic
representation of itself,

a delicate spectacle
too insubstantial to stand.

Innately optimistic,
it hung unsung on the wall
beside seasons of strolling crowds,

awaiting someone whose 
deliberate concentration of breaths
would fill it whole again.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Mandika silver member
    August 7
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    You don't sound like no novice poet to me...excellent writing!

  • Praxidikae
    May 1
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    an excellent specimen of internal rhyming. Bravah. And such a wonderful message too


  • Ithica silver member
    March 30
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    Well we definately need some uplifting to our sagging spirits? I sincerly hope we all choose carefully and the country gets taht much needed shot of prosperity and hope!!! And Mallig, can you send me some of your fairy dust, my pen needs a sprinkling of your magic....


  • CitrineSunrise
    March 28

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    This is the most interesting of campaign seasons. I am reminded of a favorite quote by Shirley Chisholm, "Of my two "handicaps" being female put more obstacles in my path than being black." Obama, however, seems to be more willing to stick with his convictions rather than formulate policy by opinion poll. The world needs his vision. Peace, Liz


    • Mallig gold member
      March 28
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      Thanks so much Liz for your comment, and also for reminding me of that great Shirley Chisolm quote!
  • Mirthryl
    March 24

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    Great title. Hope for dreams worth aspiring to. Personal vision vs. party line. May we choose well as a nation, and may we be blessed with progress toward goals worth our efforts.


  • LadyLavender gold member
    March 23

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    Wow, mallig incredible write..today their has to be someone who has the "audacity" to want change. No ones perfect, but a good intentioned heart speaks miles of
    the perfection in hope.


  • typesofchange
    March 21

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    a really cool read well done.
    not one to give a bad comment and your poem is the reson why.

    WELL DONE
  • Bob Fox
    March 21

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    Well

    I am really not sure how to approach this piece without getting politica. Perhaps he is view as a savior?

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    • Mallig gold member
      March 21
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      Thank you for your comment. I would not use the word savior, I don't think any politician can play that role alone... But I see Obama as someone who has the potential to revive hope in a country with low morale and low expectations of its leaders. I think a person who can inspire a collective hope through uplifting ideas and expression has great value in these times.

  • GrowlingBear gold member
    March 21

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    Inspiring

    Although i cannot vote for your country ..It is high time that someone did stand up for all that is right.
    Excellent write

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    • Mallig gold member
      March 21
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      Thank you for your kind comment and applause!

  • Confusedboy gold member
    March 21

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    excellent

    far to few times in this life we find a person with hope and dreams willing to step up and out. to be a leader, instead of followers. courage is needed with wit and fortitude of determination and will power. the audacity of such a man.


    • Mallig gold member
      March 21
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      Thank you for your comment, I agree wholeheartedly.

  • CountryCousin
    March 21

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    Let us hope.

    I believe that there is hope for every man of every nationality in this nation. I would hope that it will not be dashed or dimmed because someone dares to accept the challenge of being the first to dare.

    • Mallig gold member
      March 21
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      Thank you for comment, I too have great hopes for hope in our nation.

  • Peteskid gold member
    March 21

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    yes, a dream waiting for a dreamer, a dreamer who would wake up and create the dream as a reality... wonderful, inspiration here...'skid


  • secberm
    March 21

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    Read this last night but didn't get a chance to comment. Actually had something witty too but that's long forgotten. Wonderful write. One.

    Dez


  • JustBreathe gold member
    March 21

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    "Long ago,
    hope deflated.

    Flattened by the
    unrelenting weight of realities,
    discouraged by rumors
    of its impracticality"
    .........

    "awaiting someone whose
    deliberate concentration of breaths
    would fill it whole again."

    I had lost hope long ago that my vote truly made a difference in the political 'system'. Seemed like no matter the needs and priorities of the people, our politicial 'leaders' were marching to a different drum. This year is different for me. I hear someone speaking in a way I have not heard in a long, long time. He speaks about hope, about change, about making ME a part of the process. His opponents try to distract me, raising issues that have nothing to do with what I think is important right now ... high unemployment, jobs/industries going overseas, $600+ Billion already spent in Iraq (while some American children don't have schoolbooks), infrastructure detriorating (bad roads, bridges collapsing), and encouraging intelligent discourse on the issue of race (the taboo topic). For me Obama is a breath of fresh air. I'm ready to give change a chance.

    Thank you for this wonderful write Mallig!


  • poet2angels silver member
    March 20

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    Excellent...The title drew me in and I am so glad I read it. I wish everyone could before voting.....
    In my opinion, this is a brilliant write...
    Bravo!

    Lynda

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