Salt and Splinters
I cannot smile
in your presence
I cannot eat, breathe, dream either
I'm merely salt,
and cells
because,
that splinter-
in your chest-
still bleeding...
is a piece of me
Author notes
Prompt...B.
I hate you, because everytime I see you, I see a little piece of me still lodged in your heart. - X Empathetic Rose X
A contest entry
- 15/30/1 x Quickie x by xxRainbowDawnxx.
450 points, ended March 20, 2008, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Cool
I love your style. I will have to read lots of your poems. I can learn from you. Business degree? I am a full time teacher, Celtic Wiccan priest, and I run two businesses. Wish I had a business degree. :-( Another excellent write. ~Gar -
damn...
woman this ROCKS...
congrats on the well deserved gold trophy!
this is so worthy...
I love the take on the pic prompt your Muse weaved...
excellent!
Blessings! Tammy
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Bravo
A very short, but extremely potent piece of verse here! And so very wonderfully understated (which is always best in poetry) an excellent write no matter how we slice it! bravo... bravo... bravo...
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This is so wrenching and emotion filled. Why is it when I read your work I see myself? Guess that explains why your one of my favorites. This was amazing! Congrats on the well deserved gold!
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Thank you so much my friend. Perhaps we are simply kindred spirits.
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Awesome but ouch Congratulations on the Gold Sis This background is col where'd you get it or did you make it.
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Thanks hun. I made this BG a lil over 2 years ago for a friends poem, and decided to reuse it. LOL. Glad you enjoyed both.
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very cool.
i like how you broke up the lines
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hurting and unable to give it up... very sad and very beautiful... great write
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Thank you so much for the wonderful commennt!
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This is so beautiful and heart wrenching, what can I say but... you have done a magnificent job here sweetie!
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Thank you so much hun. It was a wonderful prompt to work with. I am glad you liked it, and I am honored to recieve the gold!!!
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