Perishing in the desert
a barren rust so dry.
Needing to return home,
before he fades and dies.
Finally it's coming,
brimstone clouds so dark.
Swirling inside fury,
electric embers spark.
With a lick of hope,
upon destiny's strings.
Through the air it flies,
with invisible wings.
Willing it to hit the mark,
completing homesteads spell.
Remove the desolate wasteland,
and returning to woodlands dell.
Author notes
Contest PICTURE PROMPT 16 entries/16 lines.
A contest entry
- PICTURE PROMPT XIV - 16 ENTRIES / 16 LINES by ShelleyA.
1000 points, ended April 1, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful!!
Oh My~ Magnificent piece You have versed and Love the tale told also the rhyme
Beautiful verse!!
Love this
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Keep that quill dancing...
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Good title. A very good write, interpretation of the picture prompt and story poem. Very good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. A very nice rhythm throughout the piece. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, alliteration and assonance. Thank you for your entry.
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In the last verse, you could be talking about the state of the world.
jjj
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Wow!
Great write to match the pix prompt. That's a scary background you've got here. I think I need to go rest now! Red flashing images can be detrimental to my psyche. :-). Love your imagery, choice of words, & the positive outcome of this! Bravo All the best in the contest!
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Mmmm... very intersting interpretation of that very dramatic picture... some choice words. I hope you do very well in the contest with this.
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Beautifully visual and descriptive piece, not to mention that it is done well within a rhyming scheme.
It's another one of these pieces that you see from time to time that can be expanded so well either into a longer epic, or as part of a character series.
Good write.
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Excellent
Very well done. Great take on the picture, best of luck in the contest.
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I love the rhyme & rhythm,
within the feelings & dealings...
"Finally it's coming,
brimstone clouds so dark.
Swirling inside fury,
electric embers spark."
A Sure Winner, Scribe.
~ Nicky♥
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Good write
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Wow, wonderful story for the picture, and beautifully written. Good luck in the contest!
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i enjoy a good mythical poems. bravely written, good luck xx
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excellent take on the prompt..
wow..excellent imagery, flow and rhyme..damn girl..you must have eaten your poetic wheaties..hehe...fits the picture perfectly..thanx so much for sharing..and best of luck in the contest..blessings..namaste..
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Wow that was stunning hunny! It's almost like he was firing the arrow to cast a spell over the clouds to bring rain or something.
Stunning! Perfect for that picture!
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Excellent
An excellent take on this picture, I like this one as it seems to express some hope where the darkness lay. Good luck in the contest best wishes Brian.
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love this my friend
that is the coolest picture too....you've done it again
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