I want to dispel this electromagnetic field
That keeps us from ever truly touching
Soak myself in a golden epoxy
And press my fingertips to yours
Remain very still as you hold me for years
Maybe we'll bond, more permanently
Than if we were chemically combined.
Author notes
If you want to know anything, ask.
Kikai Ni
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I really like the emotional appeal of this poem. It confuses me and yet is understandable. Strange.
"has" in line 5 should most likely be "as"
I like this one and eagerly await your other works as well...
Blessings,
C
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Your reaction was actually exactly what I hoped my readers would feel. The mood stayed quiet, but the determination does not remain present throughout. ^^ All the same, I'm glad you appreciated it.
>.< It was supposed to be 'as.' Sorry. Typo.
*deep bow* I thank you from the bottom of my very being. I am ever greatful for your blessing.
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...this must have been writen during science classes. Do you have a crush on your Physics prof?
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^.^
Actually, I wrote this during a session of Writer's Club. I jumped up and ran to the other end of the library, even though it's not that spectacular.
It's actually likely that I'd have a crush on my physics prof if he was cute; my best subject (besides English) is chemistry (but I suck at math.
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But, no, I don't; my physics prof is a girl. A crazy one at that, and not in the good way. Like, screaming me-me crazy . . .
I'm sorry. What was your question?
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Ahhh so you are sort of merging a chemistry lesson to love. Well frankly I love it! Short, but still gets the point across! Great write!
-Love you Big bro,
Adam
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Well, you required something fresh, and this is the most recent . . .
I'm glad you liked this, Oniisan. ^.^
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this is good........ short but good
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I'm more of a long-poem person myself, but this just came out the way it did.
I'm glad you still think the restricted content is good.
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