Snakes and Ladders
You know that climb is far too steep,
To this spot I’ll keep.
I’m tired of the challenges,
Life seems to want to heap
Upon these tired shoulders.
I know I need to leap.
You tell me I’ve got no back bone.
It’s fine for you to moan.
You’ve sailed along quite easily
You never felt alone.
You don’t see the chasm,
Or my heart of stone.
Well hold my hand then lover mine,
Help me walk the line.
Perhaps you can protect me
And bolster up my spine,
Keep me from the darkness;
Make your armour shine.
Author notes
I've written this for a local competition. It's about depression which fortunately is now only a memory.
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hoodwinked
I know that subject well. I am glad you got over your depression. i am still working on it. Thank you for the wonderful read. -
Hood-Winked!!!
Wow what an amazing poem!! As a sufferer of clinical depression I could so relate to your wonderful write. Such vivid imagery and emotions throughout thanks for sharing and welcome to AP.
Theresa
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I was delighted to be hood winked it was a lovely suprise. I have just started a new job and have been feeling very stressed and not very poetic so this was a much needed boost to my poetic confidence. I have to relearn how to make the most of my time as I am working shifts so when I settle down a bit I will be able to be a lot more active. I am so pleased you enjoyed my poetry.
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I agree with Dennis
Some of your poem is quite poetic. Especially, the lines he mentioned. That style shows the beginning talents of a maturing poet.
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Hoodwink!
I like this a lot, and I think it is a good discription of a depressed person. I like the metaphors in this piece! Great Job!
Love & light
Debbera
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Im glad you enjoyed the poem. It was great to be hood winked very encouraging. I hope it will rekindle the poet in me which I have lost lately due to a new job and far too much fretting. Thanks Jude
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HOODWINKED!
Interesting word picture you have painted here.
You tell me I’ve got no back bone.
It’s fine for you to moan.
You’ve sailed along quite easily
You never felt alone.
You don’t see the chasm,
Or my heart of stone.
Powerful words full of meaning! I like the simplicity and the depth of this write. Well Done!
You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!
Dennis
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You have been HOOD WINKED by The Poetic Bandits. Like the metaphor you use in these lines, the reference to the game and life. Life is a series of highs and lows, mamny times the lows bringing one into the depths of despair. One seems to find a way out and up onto the plateaus and then high into the mountains at times too - feeling so good, o nly to drops again. It is how we deal with this great differences that makes our life so interesting. Having someone to share your life with certainly makes it easier to bear.
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Thanks for hood winking me and reading my poems. Feeling really anxious at the moment about my new job so maybe I should use the poetry to help me through Thanks again Jude
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Hood-Winked!
I really like the simplistic language in this piece - it makes it more accessible to a wide audience
I hope you did well in the competition! I eally liked the last lines in this - very well done
Keep writing
Polly
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How did you do in the competition?
Interesting piece. It's a little on the simple side, but interesting. I like how you have referenced the board game.
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