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Cruel Reality

A skeptical God
Created this world
To take away!
And as it swirled
I lost my life
To the blue sea
Of sweet fake bliss
Where I am free

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  • humblpye gold member
    January 11
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    I think I know...

    where you're coming from, and i kinda like your cryptic poem, yeah, god gives and he takes away, whoever he is and whatever you say, say it your way, the sea of fake bliss, freedom! deaths sweet unfinal kiss... but you gave me an idea, I'll see what I can do, outta the black and into the blue

    You've given me a lot to think about...
    Cheers
    John


  • Sprite silver member
    March 20, 2008
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