i'll tie your hands with tight, strong bands.
i'll gag your lovely voice.
i'll cover your eyes until your sighs
make known to me your choice.
i'll spank your ass while hours pass
as you writhe in silent protest
unitl your groans turn to moans
and your deepest pleasures are confessed.
i'll pinch your breasts and other tests
to see how much you'll take.
i'll make you squirm, i'll make you yearn.
until you're about to break.
but when I, at last, permit the blast
of orgasms final render,
you'll thank me for my mastery
you'll love your sweet surrender.
Author notes
choice #2
Written December 4th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Erotica at it's best! by sad-but-true.
500 points, ended December 25, 2005, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - What BDSM Means to M/me by Tattboy.
800 points, ended February 16, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Really enjoyed reading this, the flow, the rhythm and the rhyme.
I particularly liked the ending
"but when I, at last, permit the blast
of orgasms final render,
you'll thank me for my mastery
you'll love your sweet surrender."
The ininitiated may not know about orgasm control but it can play a large part in the power dynamic of a Ds relationship.
Thanks for entering My contest, and good luck.
Tattboy
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Definite promise with this piece.
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I loved the rhyme scheme in this and the content in the poem was lovely as well.
You did a wonderful job depicting it, I'm sure. That ,ust sound funny coming from someone who doesn't live this lifestyle. Anyway, yes. I really like this. Especially the rhyme scheme, since it's so unique.
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Wow I love this poem, amazingly well written and well... yum- lol- I liked it. Please keep up thew writing
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I really enjoyed reading this darling. I do miss your work
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wow that was fun!
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Very good! Sweet dark torment!!
WhoooHoo!! Very very smooth piece!! A nice one step at a time build to a satisfying end!! Left her wilted and wanting!! -
Purrrr. That definitely got me in the mood.... to write a poem. Yeah, we'll stick with that. lol. Very nice.
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tastey...indeed tastey
I must say that as my first entry already you have caught my attention.I see you have some experience in the lifestyle.Very nice write...made me yearn....well yearn is a polite way of saying what it did.I look forward to your second entry and best of luck.
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*bows*
oh my oh my. im sure you've heard this from tons, but *shivers* wish more like you lived round these parts. -
This was quite enjoyable...... Makes me want to say "Spank me!" mmhmmm and i love how it rhymed perfectly yum... But, *pouts* you forgot to blindfold me
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God that was fantastic! Really creative and so full of yummy lust. Great write. Peace and Joy
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Awesome
I am new and innocent here and my virgin eyes are now open omg I love this poem and all the dirty words that were spoken!! -
this poem was originally written for another contest, but was disqualified because i forgot to do something when i posted it. the hosts were really pissy about it, so in a way, im glad i got disqualified from THAT contest. I would like to point out that Kei-Aira was NOT the host of that contest, and has beeen a great deal more polite.
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Screw the rules, I'm enamored and turned on intensely just reading it. The rhyme scheme was perfect, and I wouldn't be surprised with such ... wonderful imaginings you don't have hundreds of horny little submissives messaging you right now about sex. I would, but I'd prefer to be sought than to seek as it is my place. ^_^ If you want to chat though... -giggle-
Faretheewell,
Edymion
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Excellent
I had to read this again. I want that, all of it!
Hugs and bites, Lady Raven -
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(sips mimosa)
Holds whip in hand~
Now this is what I am talking about
(looks for willing victim...I mean partner)
Best wishes to you in the contest my dear~
Big hugs
and much love~Desire
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Another good poem. Again, a bit too short and not enough description, but what is here is quite good. If you could just expand on the ideas here, it would be a lot better...i mean, i did say i want detail.....but, as it is now, it's good. Not great, not crap. Just too short!!! XXXX
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wow i think i'm in love your words made me all giddy inside
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OMFG, that was awesome. Damn and me alone with the kids at home. Hot damn that was intense and as you can see I could not wait to read. Hugs and bites, Lady Raven
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Well, I thought this was a great write, even if it didn't follow the rules. Sorry it's disqualified... you got me going with it though! ;c )
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