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I Noticed Something Wondrous

 

 

 

Pleasing as a rare orchid, so delicate, so pure,

with no equivalence this side

of heaven, and praise

 

the fertile cradle that produced such as you,

with rapt passion as if reared

in deepest jungle.

 

Do you hear a thousand souls proclaiming

with wild song, stirring all

that breathes and feels?

 

“Such desire, such joy of being.”

 

A hundred sweet lifetimes guaranteed would I

gladly sacrifice, for a few moments of

your poetic prowess.

 

 

 

 

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Happy birthday Namita

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  • tara wilson gold member
    April 3, 2008

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    this is absolutely beautiful -

    "Pleasing as a rare orchid, so delicate, so pure,

    with no equivalence this side

    of heaven,"

    that is indeed her, thanks so much for this wonderful entry...


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 3, 2008

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    She is a talented one, isn't she? This is lovely poetry, Michael - it has such a sense of class and elegance about it, and i liked the sincerity of your voice here. Lovely poetry.

    Thank you for writing this for Namita.

    ~ Nicolette

  • ashjoe76
    March 21, 2008
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    excellent

    congrats lyricist! this is truly wondrous


  • BellaD
    March 20, 2008
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    Sweet!

    This is so beautiful and touching. A wonderful birthday poem.


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    March 20, 2008

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    A beautiful birthday gift for a friend. You show such kindness and affection towards those you care about. Best wishes in the contest.




  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 20, 2008

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    A beautiful and heartwarming dedication!! Such praise and respect...

    Lovely work!


  • secberm
    March 20, 2008

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    A hundred sweet lifetimes guaranteed would I
    gladly sacrifice, for a few moments of
    your poetic prowess.

    These are indeed beautiful words. Well done poet. One.

    Dez


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    March 20, 2008

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    oh this is such a beautiful write in so many levels have you penned true beauty and care. you are amazing daddy well done


  • Namita
    March 20, 2008

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    "A hundred sweet lifetimes guaranteed would I
    gladly sacrifice, for a few moments of
    your poetic prowess"

    I'm speechless. I'm just too speechless MJ... those last lines left my eyes wet.. too beautiful. Thank you so much! I too will gladly sacrifice a thousand guaranteed lifetimes to savour a few moments of having a friend like you. Thank you.

    - namita


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