A mother in front,
Of a smashed mirror.
Covering up bruises,
Made by a man that,
Loves her dearly.
A boy bloody and broken boned
Being beaten for the crime,
Of having dark skin.
Then forced to watch,
His girlfriend raped...
Over and over again.
A gang repeatedly stabs,
An individual enemy off guard,
Because he dared to walk
On their turf.
Two boys try to stage a fight,
Using knives and home made weapons,
To try and copy a movie.
An accidental knife to the chest,
Ruins the fun little game.
A little boy slaps,
His little sister,
To make her play with him.
He saw his daddy do the same,
To his stubborn mummy.
Three boys are hung,
By two fathers and a brother.
To get revenge for when they,
Beat a son into a coma,
And raped and killed a daughter.
A gang shooting is used,
To teach a lesson about killing a friend.
The enemy gang was slaughtered,
Along with three innocent by standers.
A boy takes a flying leap,
Off a six story building.
He can't cope with the guilt,
Of killing his best friend.
One act leads to another
This is the cycle of violence.
Author notes
1 Write Me a Poem about Violence. Whether for it or against, or even simply a graphic depiction of it, i want raw emotion and i want great imagery.
Sorath
A contest entry
- Plethora Of Options by Play Pretend..
650 points, ended June 10, 2008, 27 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn that silver into GOLD pt 7 by whispernthedark.
400 points, ended September 20, 2008, 33 entries
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Well I think it's bad, what do you think?
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WOW you penned this well and did describe the cycle of violence very good. I don't think this poem is bad at all, and by any means IS NOT BAD!!!!! This really does relate to what has happened in the world today. I read this and it broke my heart. I loved this, very well done and congrats on the silver!!!
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Hoodwink!
Wow! this is really graphic and discriptive. It sure does show the truth about all the ugly violent things that really do go on in the world. A great write! Congrats on the silver trophy, well deseved...
Love & Ligh
Debbera
You have been hoodwinked by a member of the group
"The Poetic Bandits!
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Yeah, you totally captured a lot of violence going on, showing the circle goes unbroken. Nice write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
♥
whisper
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Holy Hell.
This poem is brutal. I did think it was a little scattery, but other then that it was good.
Very Good.
You did a wonderful job depicting the plethora of
horrible things we do.
Excellent work.
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Please put your username in the Authors box.
If you don't i will be forced to Dq this work.
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Hooray and well done my dear ashy, i hope you get a place because you deserve one. your words were meaningful and the poem kept me captivated the whole time and i just wanted to keep reading this. all your poems provide this closure for me
and I thank you for that.
-Swintha
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I think the quote marks around the word loves are a little off putting. I thought that this poem was perfect for the option you chose though. Nicely penned.
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