Breaking your heart
Like splintering the mirror
As the crimson blood flows
I’m reminded of you
Every step that I take
Breaks apart the ocean
And every tear that falls
Shatters the world
No part of me knows
How much I really love you
But if it’s true enough
I just want to say goodbye
So…
goodbye
Author notes
second on my list. i wont post again till yall coment! mkay?? thanks
A contest entry
- TEENAGERS - We're not all thick, yeah? #2 by LaurenLightning--x.
730 points, ended May 7, 2008, 42 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
mkay randommm...good?
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This is beautiful.
I love it.
The imagery created from it is immense. It makes me want to go away and draw pretty pictures.
This piece is also filled with emotion, simply beautiful.
I especially love the second stanza, jaw droppingly beautiful =]
Well done! This is a lovely poem you have written.
Thank you for entering and goodluck!!
Arc-En-Ciel--x
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dude. this is pretty darn cutee. i love it and i understand it and its happyy.
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oh. and what the heck is your pic. a picture of?? is is a pink gutair???? wait is that a pink laptop???
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no its an iphone w/ a guitar on the screen.
lol.
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i love the metafork of breaking a mirror like breaking your heart. good good good.
i love like any connection to the ocean. its so big and filled with so many emotions.
the end was good but not as strong as the begining. it wasnt weak... i just really loved the begining. -
i like de seconddd stanzaaa yo.
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WOW I love it!! I love the "So goodbye" part!
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thanks.
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anytime!!!
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lol. dancing in history? yeahh right.
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really lets do it!!
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lololol. that sounds funny.
too late anway. :[[ lets do it (lol) when we get back mkay? -
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yeah... Nice icon?
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