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The Stalker and the Stalked

eyes locked lucidly
finger-knotted grins
carefully imagined
spiritually deceited
blended in with scenery
camouflaged underneath
the burning stars

 

patter;

 

r u s h i n g;


filling in the empty spaces
visualising bare flesh places
to draw the blood
seizing,

 

delusions l-i-n-k-i-n-g
t~w~i~s~t~e~d
thinking.


frozen;


footsteps;


fear's fingers poke and prod
flesh crawling,
thoughts... free falling.
adrenalin pumps
with every beat,
feet can't keep the pace
pulses race.


terror turns the corner,
panic possesse's insecurities breath
casually feasting on the fright,
streetlight blinking back the darkness,
senses heightened to the point of foresight.

 

passerby to shadows
the evening enveloping sweat
the pale flesh lingering
reflecting from my eyes
chaotic massacre
the kind I delicately fondle
closing sections between us
the wait -


it lasts forever


until the air circulation
between us
stops

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  • Poetess12
    April 1, 2009

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    This is a wonderful poem. The ending is great,
    "It lasts foerever, until the air circulation
    between us stops."

    Thank you for your entry.


  • Julia93
    March 31, 2008

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    Ooohhh, nice write! I love the way this poem is written... it's disturbing and creepy, but it's good I normally don't like poems that are too dark, but if they are as well-written as this one, I can't possibly mind. I think the words you used are really strong; they make the poem very vivid and interesting. I like all your descriptions... there are so many unique phrases in here. I also think your ending is really good: "it lasts forever
    until the air circulation
    between us
    stops"
    It's so chilling, but at the same time, it's powerful; I think it's a really good, solid end to your poem... it has good impact. Keep writing and good luck for the contest!
    Julia

  • Bob Fox
    March 31, 2008

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    Wow

    this is so visual and has the makings of a movie. One could think that it is a true life story. I do hope not. But boy it got my attention


  • ravensgift
    March 31, 2008
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    Creative and visual.
    I'm impressed. I really enjoyed this.

  • femurlee
    March 31, 2008

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    Spooky

    I found this thought provoking in a disturbing way. Your imagery seems to devour peace-of-mind. Great write!


  • kaymile
    March 31, 2008

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    Oh i adore some of the lines! casually feasting on the fright. =) Whoa, i encourage you to keep writing. =3


  • N e a r
    March 31, 2008
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    w00t w00t


  • individuality gold member
    March 30, 2008

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    i especially like the little purple face thingymajig that blinks, it adds blueberry pie to the whole poem that of course the cat wants

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