painting eyelids the color
of flowers so dark
you'd swear it's blood
[because maybe it is]
tight shirts, tight pants, loose hair
in hopes to attract the other sex
for it is only human nature.
[we thought we were the civilized kind.]
pluck, pluck
above a stare of glass,
comparing to the gentle rose...
her delicate petals dropping
uncovering carefully hidden modesty
virginity stained
when all is done,
body ready for examination,
walk the catwalk of girlfriends' inspection...
so is the way of little girls.
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Author notes
hmm. Glad I'm not part of a clique.
A contest entry
- "they said all teenagers scare the living shit out of me, so darken your clothes and strike a violent pose." invite only. by Ryno.
450 points, ended April 1, 2008, 5 entries
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Haha. Ingenious. I loved the sarcasm here, some of the phrasing was really well down and the similes of welting flowers was excellent considering that they want to compare themselves to the beauty of a flower.
Wicked message here, but defiantly relates to something among teenagers.
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wow... this is amazing... I really love the descriptions you brought in this piece. they were wonderful... really... breathtaking in the way you stated them...
the flow is amazing too...
everything is perfect in this poem........ Of course
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you know this is amazing and you alwyas write with such a power and a depth that amazes me.well done beautiful sis
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this is REALLY good, i interpret it as a really big statement about life and how the society has changed. We are just growing up too fast, and its no good. I love the comparison eye shadow and blood. I try not to turn into one of those girl [mom would FREAK!!]. Really Good. =]
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and delecate - delicate I'm soooooorry! I shouldn't nit-pick such a great poem!
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dang typos.
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Cassie, take the n out of "exanmination" otherwise, this is absolutely amazing. It's so true, and it says a lot about the sad society we live in. Great poem!
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