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Psalms of my Soul

Don't hate

my

Destiny,

as I am a vessel...

willing

as I want to be,

Psalms read

palms fed;

nevertheless my soul

seeks that of many paths...

unknown

covered sugarcones,

while I fight,

alone

homeless in my mind;

fighting all the time

emptying my pockets

with lint

while the leap years,

claim my last dime.

Polished and preserved

as mother earth

moves me

into a category of

unfamiliar territory.

Standing in quick sand,

as my life passes by

while man looks down upon me

for my mistakes,

tears fall

from my eyes

the hate...

must I go on?

This is you

or is it me?

Questions, asked

ultimately

now I have read 

my Psalms

of a spirit that has been torn.

In a list

A contest entry

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  • MMGerard323
    April 28, 2008
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    i love it. great job
    good luck in my contest

    ♥ MMGerard32


  • catz Moderators member
    April 5, 2008

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    A deeply beautiful and meaningful poem You've reached inside you to bring forth such spiritually reminescent verbiage. A poignant and lovely piece

    Dee


  • RatherImaginative silver member
    April 2, 2008

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    This feels to me to be such a sad piece, of one who wants to hope yet perhaps has none left. It can indeed to find the will to put one foot in front of the other and try to find a way out of it. Wonderful imagery!


  • ckwriter69
    April 1, 2008

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    Beautifully written words. This really has a lot to say and is very touching. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.


  • FifthDove
    April 1, 2008

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    I hope your spirit gets meanded soon and the lint in your pockets is replaced with pure gold. Love the poem. Thank you for the entry and best wishes to you in the contest


  • The Hermit
    March 31, 2008
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    This liek all the poem I have read have a meaning to them of strength thorough hard times.


  • Swan song gold member
    March 30, 2008

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    I would really love to see you read your poems in person I mean that. I hope you have thought about that.
    You have a very strong cadence in your poetry and I would like to inspire you to explore all of your emotions and thoughts in every part of your life.
    I have this feeling that you would realy grow if you found a place where they read poetry and have readings
    Your poetry is good but if you got an augiance and learned to interact I think it would be like throwing gas on dried wood.


    • AddictiveTRUTH
      March 30, 2008
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      Thank you Jeff

      your comment and encouraging words mean so much to me I've been told this many times before and at the current moment I am working on persueing such.

      My Poetry is a part of my daily life now and it runs thru me like the blood in my veins.

      I will never forget you

      All the best,
      Ephiphany


  • zochit2me gold member
    March 28, 2008

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    I love the flow of this. A couple of places broke for me though and I had to stop and absorb to understand...one place is

    tears fall
    from my eyes
    the hate...

    Not understanding the hate part...
    It seems out of place here to me. Just my humble opinion.

    This is you
    or is it me? perhaps different wording here, since you start off with "my destiny" I think it should read

    Is this me?
    it could be you of something along these lines.

    All in all I enjoyed it though. I hope this helps

    Becky


    • AddictiveTRUTH
      March 28, 2008
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      Ok, thank you so much Becky

      I do appreciate your critique while I strive to improve my writing. Hope you continue to be of assistance.

      e


  • Elfin
    March 28, 2008

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    Not being an expert on free verse it is difficult for me to issue you with fair comment as to your poems build up but I can say that I didn't think it was too long nor to heavy. I enjoyed the flow which was smooth and it is packed with emotion. All in all I think that you have done well here, I just wish that I could be a bit more constructive. Val


    • AddictiveTRUTH
      March 28, 2008
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      Thanks Val

      I appreciate and accept your honest critique. That is what I am here for to grow in my Passion to write in the utmost way to draw the reader in.

      Thanks again, looking forward to more of your honesty.

      e


  • Picnic-Lightning
    March 28, 2008

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    On a note completely unreated to poetry---Lighten up ^.^ the world is shit sometimes, but it can be really great too---go have a bit of fun, do it for me

    Looking beyond your fatalism, though.

    You've certainly done what you were aiming for. It's effective in the emotional sense that the reader understands the feeling you want to convey. I would say though, that something this heavy should probably not be quite so long----it's a bit too much honestly. It has that feeling of---just one thing after another, and by the end I'm left wanting to take you to a park on a nice day and shake you until you start laughing.

    I'd say the way to fix this without changing the tone of the poem completely is just to give it more of a narrow focus. Not just shorter, but concentrating on one or two of the points you have here, which you've really achieved quite nicely individually.

    Well done--you've got a lot of talent--

    Nadya


    • AddictiveTRUTH
      March 28, 2008
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      Ok, I understand.

      Will work on this Listen, I really do appreciate your critique, as I grow in my writing, I do hope you will stay aboard and help me along the way.

      Enjoy your weekend, and thanks again.
      Ephiphany


      • Picnic-Lightning
        March 28, 2008
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        And I will

        Thanks for not taking it personally---I really do think you're quite a good writer.


  • kvwriter silver member
    March 21, 2008

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    Paths, destiny, unfamiliar--all words that resonate intense meaning to me. You are a child of the universe and a beautiful one at that!

    Love this write. Such depth in the revelations of your soul. Sometimes we all feel like we fight alone, but we don't. We don't.

    Be blessed!
    Kelly
    (Hugs

    • AddictiveTRUTH
      March 21, 2008
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      Thank you so much Kelly

      I appreciate your kind words on this piece.
      Greatly appreciated.

      Ephiphany

  • Eusebius
    March 21, 2008

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    bravo

    Quite interesting and intriguing piece of poetry filled with fine poetic phrasings...could mean several things... I liked it a great deal... bravo... bravo... bravo..

    • AddictiveTRUTH
      March 21, 2008
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      Thanks Eusebius

      I appreciate your comment very much on this.
      Ephiphany


  • moluv10
    March 20, 2008

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    Your deep words flow so effortless in this stunning write! Love the structure of this. Excellent work. You're forever evolving your styles which keeps me hooked. I love it!


  • Ms Sexy silver member
    March 19, 2008

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    "as man looks down on me" that's some shit. Those the ones I can't stand. Like they better than me. I liked the flow sis this was good.


  • secberm
    March 19, 2008

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    Loved the flow on this one sister. Some poems drop heavy, fat and filled. Sometimes dropping on head. Bead dripped from awnings to hats or umbrellas. Sometimes they are nice. This was a trickle. Unlike those drips from faucets giving headaches to insomniacs. This stream flows quiet and consistent. Relaxing like a waterfall. The sounds of nature. Well done, poetess. One.

    Dez

    • AddictiveTRUTH
      March 19, 2008
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      This comment

      means a lot to me, Dez. I appreciate you very much.
      Ephiphany...always, One


  • poeticweaver gold member
    March 19, 2008

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    Bravo~

    The book of Psalms in a heart-felt book of honest pages that when you read each line, you connect with the author more and more. I found myself connecting with your words from your heart and soul, and each line captivated me with a part of you, and your thoughts. We'll all forever have some questions, until the day we quit asking them anyway. But I feel if ya have a brain, searching for the truth, as well as sharing it. Is using wisdom. Thanks for this heart-felt piece my dear friend. Peace, Timothy aka poeticweaver~ xo


    • AddictiveTRUTH
      March 19, 2008
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      Thanks Timothy

      I always appreciate your support.
      So glad to have you as a friend, indeed good ppl are hard to come across these days, but you...are one in a million in heart.

      Much love and respect,
      E


  • Mrs LadyEnthralling
    March 19, 2008

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    zest in different i am liking this because you are bringing a difference to your up to date way of writing and you doing a me not letting your reader get attach to one way of you give them u turns and something with kick ass i ike this


    • AddictiveTRUTH
      March 19, 2008
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      Wow...

      thanks Lovely I was in the middle of filing some papers, and this hit me...weird, huh?
      I had to write it down
      Thanks for being a part of my inspiration,
      Much love and respect,
      theLady and s for you


  • HaleyMary
    March 19, 2008

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    Powerful write, Sis. This expressed lots of emotion and it made me think of how people may feel lost in life sometimes. It's sometimes hard to know where to turn or what we should do in certain situations in life. Thanks for sharing and keep that pen flowing.


    • AddictiveTRUTH
      March 19, 2008
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      Thanks Haley

      you always make me feel that what I write is worth the effort. I thank you with all of my

      Piff

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