Wandering aimlessly though the depths of my mind
Searching for the right way to explain it all
To find the words to express how much of a bitch you were
Things were already complicated, we both knew and accepted this
But where was the effort when things got difficult?
When things become a little hopeless and communication break down?
Lets play role reversal for a moment
Had I fallen into the arms of another two days later
Would you have bothered giving me the time of day?
I think not, and yet you remained obvious to this
Always acting confused when faced with reason
Blocking those that try to point these things out
However mildly it was done
How else do you expect my friends to react?
Hearing you talk down about my feelings when even
Then knew how much I loved you and cared about you
Knew about the effort I was willing to put in
Along with my dreams for you and I, those same dreams
You requested me to tell you, to believe more in us
Yet now it feels all for nothing and I feel a little used
As you can see I've been left with my thoughts for a while
Along with my memories and you know how good I am at remembering
Yet there's one thought I came to as a conclusion
I didn't need this drama, didn't need to feel the way I did
Feel like I've lost three months and feel bitter with emptyness
Feel like there was someone more special to share what I did with you
Yet ultimately I feel that the only thing you know about love
Is how to manipulate people with it!
Author notes
I ponder with the last stanza if it was a little harsh. But it's all the more painful and bad memories I'm trying to get closure from with this poem so that I still keep the letters that were sent with the better memories. Oh and w00t new poem in a while that's actually finished!
Comments
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I too, wonder if you meant to say oblivious in line ten instead of obvious. I always love reading your work and feel bad for you with this piece, because to me, you are one of my happy-go-lucky fun friends and I have a hard time seeing you anything but that.
Also, the title of your piece is a reworking of my screen name and you know that I know what you were feeling when you wrote this.
*hugs*
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You are quite clever. I enjoyed this.
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wow dude
thats...sad..I feel ya..I know how much it hurts for someone to walk all over your feelings, great write -
nice write
this is me
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Wow.My brittish friend,that is awesome.I connect to this poem somehow...
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Saw you come online, and wondered if you had any new poetry or anything i hadnt already read, and i dont think i have read this, and for sake of sounding like a comment bot im not gonna go on about emotion or style, because i think youre a fantastic writer and this doesnt fall short of expectation. great work ^^
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Is "obvious" supposed to be "oblivious"?
Other than that slight confusion, you have a powerful message written in your space, and it certainly does come off with a bit of brutality. Imagine if someone told you that every waking moment she spent with you was a waste?
But in any case, the might of the message is what makes it something interesting to read, and I hope that this issue, should it have truly come to it, ended in somewhat calm resolution.
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i can really relate with this one ... i love it .... u can tell that u have put a lot of thought into this one
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made me cry like a baby, you did. I love that. I added your name to my list, I hope you don't mind.
I would like to read more of your work.
I'm new here, and your poem came up first. Thank you for letting me read it.
Holly
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That is a really cool poem and you are a real good poe
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This is a very heart-felt poem
Good job
I lovers you bunchez
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i love this!! very emotional for me though...
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Aww,it just ain't fair,isn't it??
Maybe I would go as far as to say that you bear much hatred for this person,for the hurt and pain she caused you?
Sorry about that...and I liked the piece;you poured out your emotions well.
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that sounds like a bad brake up i'm sorry but its good poetry smile *gives you a hug*
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good job
good to see you getting it all out matty
and not holding back or being polite
and no the last stanza made it just right
one complaint though ...the background OMG it hurts sooo much
so yeah good on ya matty big
's for this
~ ♥ Rena ♥ ~
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This is a good poem RM, dearest. But on the third paragraph you put fell instead of feel a little used. Other than that you can feel the emotions just pour out of the words. Great write. Ttyl
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Good job!!
I think you expressed your true feelings very well. I'm just sorry things didn't work out for you. You are a wonderful guy, and you'll find a great girl. I'm sure of it because I know you deserve it. Take care!! Jani
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Wow...
This is a rather interesting poem. Full of sadness and somewhat hatred. I know that most will be able to relate to this poem for the fact that some have been in the situation that not even three days and their ex is already with someone else. Whether it be an ex or a new person, it doesn't matter.
"Yet there's one thought I came to as a conclusion
I didn't need this drama, didn't need to feel the way I did
Feel like I've lost three months and feel bitter with emptyness
Feel like there was someone more special to share what I did with you
Yet ultimately I feel that the only thing you know about love
Is how to manipulate people with it!"
Even though you say that the last stanza may be a little harsh sometimes the truth itself is harsh. Words hurt people more than anything else in the world. I've learned that they can either make you or break you seems like you've been hurt and are trying to make the best of it. And for that I admire you and say good luck it with and my life bring nothing else but the good and no longer the bad.
~*Heart*~
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